Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good answer: direct, natural and gives reasons. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a linking word for coherence. Also use a more appropriate expression than “rolling on my phone.” Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel because watching the passing scenery helps me relax and makes the journey feel shorter. Moreover, it stops me from using my phone too much, which is better for my eyes and concentration.

提案: The idea is clear but the answer contains unclear and incorrect phrases (e.g. “nap sorts of the strength you surrounding”). To improve, use simple, correct sentences: say how often you take photos, give a reason and an example. Use linking words like ‘so’ or ‘because’ and avoid vague phrases.

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery because I like to save memories from trips. For example, last month I photographed a coastal sunset to show my friends and to remember the colours long after the trip.

提案: You answered directly and gave reasons, but the second clause is awkward and grammatically incorrect. Improve by using clear linking words (e.g. ‘although’), correct grammar, and a short specific detail comparing both options.

例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. Although I appreciate the mountains for their rich plant and animal life, I find the sea more refreshing and better for water activities.

× Yes, I always gaze outside the window as soon as I hit the road because watching the world go by helps me feel relaxed and pass the time. It's also a good way to avoid rolling on my phone, which is better for my eyes.

✓ Yes, I always gaze out of the window as soon as I hit the road because watching the world go by helps me feel relaxed and pass the time. It's also a good way to avoid scrolling on my phone, which is better for my eyes.

The phrase 'gaze outside the window' is acceptable but 'gaze out of the window' is more idiomatic in English. More importantly, 'rolling on my phone' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'scroll' when referring to moving through content on a phone. This is a verb selection error related to present participle usage; use 'scrolling' as the -ing form of the correct verb. Suggestion: replace 'rolling on my phone' with 'scrolling on my phone.'

× Of course, capturing beautiful landscapes is one of the most enjoyable parts of traveling, so I often take nap sorts of the strength you surrounding to reserve those memorable moments because a picture is worth 1000 words.

✓ Of course, capturing beautiful landscapes is one of the most enjoyable parts of traveling, so I often take photos of the scenery around me to preserve those memorable moments, because a picture is worth 1000 words.

This sentence contains multiple word choice and structure errors. 'Take nap sorts of the strength you surrounding' is ungrammatical and seems to attempt to mean 'take photos of the scenery around you/me.' Use 'take photos' (correct collocation) and 'scenery around me' to match speaker perspective. 'Reserve' is incorrect in this context; the proper verb is 'preserve' (or 'save'). Also add a comma before 'because' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify the clause to 'I often take photos of the scenery around me to preserve those memorable moments.'

× I am more into the sea because I enjoy swimming and watching marine documentaries that says Highlands are also appealing with their reach of flora and fauna.

✓ I am more into the sea because I enjoy swimming and watching marine documentaries that say highlands are also appealing because of their rich flora and fauna.

There are tense and agreement errors: 'documentaries that says' is incorrect because 'documentaries' is plural so the verb must be 'say' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'Highlands' should be lowercase 'highlands' unless referring to a specific named region; using 'highlands' in lowercase is natural here. 'with their reach of flora and fauna' is awkward; use 'because of their rich flora and fauna' or 'for their rich biodiversity.' Suggestion: change 'says' to 'say' and rephrase the end to 'because of their rich flora and fauna.'