Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (e.g. "when travelling by bus or car"), and give one or two specific details linked logically (use linking words like "because" or "for example"). Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. I often look out the window when travelling by bus or car because I enjoy watching changing landscapes. For example, I like seeing urban streets turn into countryside fields, which helps me relax and notice local life.

提案: Reduce hesitations and filler words. Give a clear topic sentence, then a specific reason and one brief example. Use linking words (e.g. "because", "for example") and correct collocations (say "beautiful scenery" not "beautiful sceneries"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I enjoy capturing different landscapes. For example, I like photographing rolling hills and coastal views, which I later use for my photo collection.

提案: Answer directly and clearly (choose one or say you like both but explain). Fix grammar ("interesting question", "I can't choose", "mountain landscapes", "shore of the sea"). Use linking words to compare (e.g. "on the one hand... on the other hand") and give one specific reason for each preference. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: That's a difficult question because I like both. On the one hand I prefer mountains for their dramatic views and fresh air; on the other hand I enjoy the sea because sitting on the shore is very relaxing.

× Yes, I'm finding it's interesting to look out at the window, at the scenery when traveling with us or car.

✓ Yes, I find it interesting to look out of the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car.

Use simple present 'I find' for habitual or general truths rather than 'I'm finding'. Use correct preposition 'out of the window' and 'travelling by bus or car'. Replace 'with us or car' which is ungrammatical.

× Because for me it's really amusing to look out the window because I can see a lot of pictures and just views of our nature, real life or something else or so on.

✓ For me it's really enjoyable to look out of the window because I can see many scenes of nature and everyday life.

Avoid repetition of 'because' at sentence start and use 'enjoyable' rather than 'amusing' for this context. Use 'look out of the window' and 'many scenes' instead of 'a lot of pictures and just views'. Remove vague phrases like 'something else or so on'.

× Uh, yes, by the way, I'm a big fan of taking photos of the scenery outside the car window and I, and I'm really keen on uh, to take pictures of umm, of beautiful sceneries and many different landscapes and I find it relaxing and interesting to take.

✓ Yes, I'm a big fan of taking photos of the scenery outside the car window, and I'm really keen to take pictures of beautiful scenes and different landscapes; I find it relaxing and interesting.

Use 'keen to' or 'keen on + noun/gerund' (here 'keen to take' is natural). Use 'scenery' or 'scenes' rather than 'sceneries' (uncountable). Complete the final clause without repeating 'to take' unnecessarily.

× To take what?

✓ What do you mean 'to take' or 'Take what exactly?','explanation':'The fragment "To take what?" is informal and unclear in this context. Use a complete question like "Take what exactly?" or "What do you mean by 'to take'?" to be grammatically correct and clear.'

The fragment 'To take what?' is not a complete question in standard English; rephrase to a full question for clarity.

× Uh, is interesting question because I can choose none of them because I like both, because I prefer in the mountains, because I love mountains landscapes, and also I love the sea because it's really relaxing sitting at the share of the sea and dreaming of something.

✓ That's an interesting question because I can't choose between them; I like both. I prefer the mountains because I love mountain landscapes, but I also love the sea because it's really relaxing to sit by the shore and daydream.

Use 'That's an interesting question' (complete clause). Use 'can't choose between them' instead of 'choose none of them'. Use 'prefer the mountains' without 'in'. Use 'mountain landscapes' (adjective before noun). Use 'sit by the shore' and 'daydream' rather than 'sitting at the share of the sea and dreaming of something' which contains word choice and preposition errors.