Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接但表达不够自然且有重复。注意使用更地道的短句，避免重复词（如 "scenery" 多次出现），并加一两句具体细节来丰富内容。可以用连词连接观点和细节，使回答更流畅。

例: Yes, I often look out the window when travelling by car or bus. I enjoy watching changing views like city streets, rice fields and distant hills, which help me relax. For example, last weekend I watched farmers working in the fields and felt peaceful.

提案: 回答中有很多填充词（uh, umm）和重复，导致不自然。建议用简洁明确的句子说明何时会拍照并给出具体原因或例子，如用来记录记忆或分享到社交媒体。控制语速，减少停顿。

例: Yes, I usually take photos from the window when something catches my eye, like a colorful sunset or interesting architecture. I do this to keep memories and sometimes post the pictures on social media.

提案: 回答表意清楚但语言单调且重复形容词（fantastic, beautiful）。建议先直接给出偏好理由，然后用一两个具体细节或对比来支撑，如海边活动或心情变化。使用连接词使结构更清晰。

例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because it feels more relaxing and romantic. For instance, I enjoy walking along the beach, listening to the waves and watching the sunset, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

× Of course, I will appreciate the scenery of the window because it is attractive for me to see more sceneries.

✓ Of course, I appreciate the scenery outside the window because it is attractive and I like to see more scenery.

问题类型：现在时错误。原句中使用“will appreciate”暗示将来时，但描述的是习惯性行为（在乘车时看风景），应使用一般现在时“appreciate”。此外，'sceneries' 是不可数名词或通常用复数不合适，改为单数'scenery'；'of the window' 改为更自然的 'outside the window'。建议在描述习惯或常态时使用一般现在时，注意不可数名词的单复数用法。

× Yeah, I would like to take photos of the scenery outside the car window if the the scenery is very attractive. Umm, I uh, I like uh, taking photos in my daily life because it is a, a good way.

✓ Yeah, I would like to take photos of the scenery outside the car window if the scenery is very attractive. Umm, I like taking photos in my daily life because it is a good hobby.

问题类型：动词 + -ing 形式和词类使用。删除重复的'the'。第二句去掉多余语气词并改成更自然表达‘I like taking photos’（动名词作宾语正确）。原句 'a good way' 用词不当，改为'a good hobby' 更贴切。建议练习用动名词作为喜欢做的事情的宾语，并选择合适的名词搭配。

× Compared to mountains, I would like to choose sea because it is very fantastic and romantic.

✓ Compared to the mountains, I would prefer the sea because it is very beautiful and romantic.

问题类型：比较级/最高级使用不当。原句 'Compared to mountains' 缺少定冠词且 'choose sea' 不自然，改为 'the mountains' 和 'the sea' 更准确；'would like to choose' 冗长，改为 'would prefer' 更地道；'fantastic' 可以换为 'beautiful' 更符合描述自然景色的常用词。建议在进行比较时注意定冠词使用及选择更自然的动词短语。

× The sea is very widespread and beautiful for me to appreciate and to see.

✓ The sea is very vast and beautiful for me to admire and see.

问题类型：现在时和词汇选择。原句中 'widespread' 用于描述地域分布不够恰当，改为 'vast' 更能表达海洋辽阔；'for me to appreciate and to see' 结构冗长，改为 'for me to admire and see' 更简洁自然。同时保持一般现在时因为描述习惯或事实。建议多用合适形容词搭配和简洁的不定式短语。