Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并注意语法与用词准确。可先用一句话明确答复（肯定或否定），然后用1–2句具体说明原因或感受，避免重复和语病；使用恰当的词汇（例如 view, explore, notice 而不是 scenario, wash out）。另外将句子简化，控制在最多5句内，并使用连接词如 because / so / when 使逻辑清晰。

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when travelling, especially when arriving at a new city. I feel curious and try to notice the buildings and layout because it gives me a first impression of the place.

提案: 回答要更简洁、语法正确并提供具体原因或例子。先直接回答 No，然后用一到两句解释原因，注意用词（例如 blurred photos, reflections, glare），并提供替代做法（I prefer to enjoy it with my eyes）。避免拼写和搭配错误（bravo photos → good/clear photos）。

例: No, I don't usually take photos from a moving car because reflections and motion often make the pictures blurry. Instead, I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes and remember the scene.

提案: 先直接给出偏好，然后用2–3句具体说明原因并举例。注意语法（provide → provides; clear your mind 而不是 clear your minds）；避免冗长或不完整的句子，使用连接词 like, because, so 来组织信息，使表达自然流畅。可以补充一个具体场景来增强说服力。

例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because the beach makes me feel calm and relaxed. For example, listening to the waves and breathing the fresh air helps me forget work stress and focus on the moment.

× Yes, especially you depart from the airport to the city you travel, you will feel curious about the scenario of this city or country.

✓ Yes. Especially when you depart from the airport and travel to the city, you will feel curious about the appearance of that city or country.

句子结构混乱，缺少必要连接词和正确的从句结构。原句中“you depart... to the city you travel”不符合英语逻辑，应使用时间状语从句“when you depart... and travel to the city”。并且“scenario”用法不当，改为“appearance”或“landscape”。建议使用完整的从句，并注意词汇搭配。

× You really want to wash out the building in this city, so the first time you look out the window at the scenery.

✓ You really want to take in the buildings in the city, so the first thing you do is look out the window at the scenery.

原句“wash out the building”是用词错误且句子缺乏主谓一致和逻辑顺序。“the first time you look out...”语义不清，改为常见表达“the first thing you do is...”。建议学习常用动词短语如“take in”和固定表达。

× No, it's difficult to take a bravo photos of the scenery outside the car window.

✓ No. It's difficult to take good photos of the scenery outside the car window.

“a bravo photos”包含冠词和单复数错误，“photos”为复数时不能用不定冠词“a”；“bravo”用词不当，应为“good”。应注意冠词与名词单复数的一致性以及形容词的正确选择。

× The main reason is the window will block your scenery.

✓ The main reason is that the window blocks the view.

原句中缺少连接词“that”并且“block your scenery”表达不自然，改为习惯用法“blocks the view”。同时将时态调整为一般现在以表示普遍事实。

× You can take it so I will enjoy it through my eyes, not the camera.

✓ You can take photos, but I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes rather than through a camera.

原句连接词使用错误，“so”不符合逻辑关系；“take it”含糊，需明确“take photos”。并且“enjoy it through my eyes, not the camera”语序和表达不自然，改为更地道的对比句型。

× I prefer the sea rather than mountains.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains.

偏好表达常用结构是“prefer A to B”，而非“prefer A rather than B”。同时“mountains”前需加定冠词“the”与“the sea”对应。建议记住“prefer ... to ...”的结构。

× The sea provide you peace and quiet and that moment you will close your eyes and enjoy the waves which can clear your minds and you will focus on that moment which is.

✓ The sea provides you with peace and quiet; at that moment you close your eyes and enjoy the waves, which can clear your mind and help you focus on the present.

原句主谓不一致，“The sea provide”应为“provides”。此外整句冗长、标点和从句使用不当（如重复“that moment”并使用错误的关系从句“which is”）。“clear your minds”应为“clear your mind”。建议拆分句子，确保主谓一致并使用正确代词和关系从句。