Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and incorrect word forms (e.g. "window side", "scenario").

例: Yes, I always prefer to sit by the window when I travel. For example, last month I watched the countryside roll by and it relaxed me because I enjoy seeing changing landscapes and small villages.

提案: Answer directly and give a specific reason or example. Use correct verb forms and limit repetition. Use a linking phrase to add detail and avoid colloquial fillers.

例: Yes, I often take photos from the window because I like capturing nature. For instance, when I drove through the hills last summer I took many photos of the valleys and misty trees to remember the trip.

提案: Give a clear preference sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, and) and avoid excessive hesitation. Correct small errors ("Cox's Bazar" trip -> "I went to Cox's Bazar").

例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy seaside views and fresh air. For example, I went to Cox's Bazar last year and loved watching the sunrise and sunset over the ocean, which felt very peaceful.

× Yes, definitely I do this uh, whenever I go out, I prefer to sit in a window side and I love to uh see the scenario when I traveled uh, it's made me blissfully happy when I saw this and I feel the umm ear naturally.

✓ Yes, definitely I do. Whenever I travel, I prefer to sit by the window and I love to see the scenery. Seeing it makes me blissfully happy and I feel at ease.

Multiple issues: run-on sentences, incorrect verb forms and prepositions, and awkward phrasing. 'Do this' is vague; replace with 'do'. Use present simple 'whenever I travel' for habitual action (Present tense issue ID 6). Use preposition 'by the window' not 'in a window side' (Incorrect use of prepositions ID 11). 'Scenario' should be 'scenery' (word choice but falls under sentence structure). 'When I traveled' mixes past tense incorrectly with habitual context (Past tense issue ID 5); change to a present participle construction 'Seeing it' or present 'Seeing it makes me...'. 'It's made me' is wrong tense for ongoing feeling; use 'Seeing it makes me blissfully happy.' Suggestion: break into shorter sentences, use consistent present tense for habits, use correct prepositions and vocabulary.

× Yes, definitely I do this. I'm just keen on, you know, take a photo whenever I travel anywhere I captured the natural view. Uh, I, I, I, I love this to do.

✓ Yes, definitely I do. I'm just keen on, you know, taking photos whenever I travel; I capture the natural views. I love doing this.

Incorrect verb form after 'keen on' requires an -ing form (Verb + -ing form ID 8). 'Take a photo' should be 'taking photos'. Also tense and structure: 'whenever I travel anywhere I captured' mixes present habit with past tense 'captured' (Present tense issue ID 6 and Past tense issue ID 5); change to present simple 'I capture'. 'Love this to do' is ungrammatical; use 'I love doing this.' Suggestions: use gerunds after prepositions, keep consistent present tense for habits, and simplify repetition.

× I prefer sea, uh, because of, I love, uh, the sea view.

✓ I prefer the sea, because I love the sea view.

Missing definite article before 'sea' when referring to a specific sea in general preference (Article errors ID 22). Use 'the sea' and remove filler words for clarity. Suggestion: include the definite article when talking about 'the sea' as a place or view.

× Uh, I, uh, last year I went Cox's Bazar, uh, for that day.

✓ Last year I went to Cox's Bazar for a day.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'went' (Incorrect use of prepositions ID 11) and awkward time expression 'for that day' should be 'for a day' or 'for that day' context unnecessary. Also reorder for natural English. Use past simple correctly for a completed past action (Past tense issue ID 5). Suggestion: include 'to' with places and use clear duration expressions.

× I love to, uh, see because of sunset or, and sunrise is very amazing.

✓ I love to see the sunset and the sunrise; they are both amazing.

Awkward and ungrammatical wording: 'see because of sunset' is incorrect (Sentence structure errors ID 26). Use parallel structure: 'see the sunset and the sunrise' and add definite article 'the' (Article errors ID 22). Also 'is very amazing' should refer correctly to plural 'they are both amazing' (Subject-verb agreement ID 27). Suggestion: use clear object phrases and ensure subject-verb agreement when referring to multiple items.