Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然、清晰且避免重复。注意语法（如冠词和动词形式）、词汇错误（salary→scenery）和句子结构。回答应先给出明确的主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持，使用连词使表达连贯。例如说明什么时候看、喜欢看什么样的风景，以及为什么喜欢。保持不超过5句。

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus because I don't own a car. I especially enjoy watching urban streets and green hills because they help me relax after work. For example, I like seeing people going about their day and the changing light on the buildings, which makes the journey pleasant.

提案: 回答存在严重语法和词汇错误，表达不连贯且含混（如forced, pray, tap water skills, salary）。应直接回答是否拍照，然后给出具体原因和一次例子。使用恰当词汇如 "often/sometimes/take photos" 和描述拍照的目的或内容。句子不超过三到四句。

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos from the car window when the view is interesting. I usually photograph landscapes like mountains or colorful sunsets to remember the trip. For instance, last month I captured a beautiful sunset over the river and later used the photo as my phone wallpaper.

提案: 回答含糊且重复，词汇和发音错误（look the sea, pray for, banters）。应先明确表明偏好，然后用具体原因支持（如空气、活动、景色）。用连接词（because, although, but）使逻辑清晰，避免犹豫语气词。控制在三句以内。

例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the fresh air. The scenery is peaceful and there are many good trails for exercise. For example, I climbed a nearby mountain last month and loved the quiet views and cool breeze.

× I look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus because I don't have car and I think the salary is very beautiful so that I try my best to look at.

✓ I look out the window at the scenery when I travel by bus because I don't have a car and I think the scenery is very beautiful, so I try my best to look at it.

错误类型：冠词使用与词汇/代词错误。问题在于缺少不定冠词“a”之前的“car”，以及把“scenery”误写为“salary”和句尾缺少指代“it”。建议：在可数单数名词前加不定冠词（a/an）；使用正确词汇“scenery”；在需要指代名词时用代词“it”。

× Yes, of course I forced. I pray for taking photos.

✓ Yes, of course I do. I prefer taking photos.

错误类型：句子结构与词汇误用。原句“forced”与“pray for”用法不符合语境。应使用一般现在时表示习惯（do/does）和动词短语“prefer taking photos”或“like taking photos”。建议：用正确的动词表达意图：’I do’表示肯定，’I prefer taking photos’表示偏好。

× Uh, recently I practice the tap water skills, so I take photos of the salary outside the car window because I think it's very beautiful so that I do it.

✓ Recently I have been practicing photography skills, so I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I think it's very beautiful.

错误类型：动词+ing形式与词汇错误。原句’tap water skills’和’salary’错误；时态也应使用现在完成进行时表示最近的持续活动。建议：用短语‘practice photography skills’或‘have been practicing photography’；用正确名词‘scenery’；去掉多余的‘so that I do it’。

× Actually, I don't look the sea, maybe I prefer the sea, but recently I pray for the mountains because I climb the banters, umm, several times ago and I think it's fresh, uh, air and beauty.

✓ Actually, I don't often go to the sea; maybe I prefer the sea, but recently I prefer the mountains because I climbed the banter several times ago and I think the air is fresh and the scenery is beautiful.

错误类型：现在时与过去时混用、动词搭配错误、词汇错误。原句‘don't look the sea’应为go to the sea或don't often go to the sea；‘pray for’错误，应为prefer；‘climb the banters’和‘banters’词不当，改为特定地点名词或‘mountains’；‘several times ago’和动词时态不一致，过去发生应使用过去式climbed，且‘several times ago’通常说‘several times’或‘a few times ago’。建议：根据时间选择正确时态；用正确动词（go to, prefer, climb）和正确名词（mountains, scenery）；词序为“The air is fresh and the scenery is beautiful.”。