Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar and sentence structure, and make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement and article use, and add one specific example using a linking word. Also limit to 3–4 sentences to sound more natural.

例: Yes, I usually sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the passing landscape. For example, I like to look at fields and small villages as the bus moves, which helps me relax. Because of that, window seats give me a sense of peace during long journeys.

提案: Make responses more fluent by combining sentences and using linking words. Correct small errors (prepositions, plurality) and add a brief reason or specific example to expand naturally. Keep it within four sentences.

例: Yes, I often take photos and short videos of the scenery and then upload them to Instagram. For instance, I recently recorded a time-lapse of a mountain road to share with my followers, because I enjoy making travel content and documenting interesting views.

提案: Use a natural adjective phrase and correct grammar. Start with a clear preference sentence, then support it with specific reasons and one example. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'a too close to nature'.

例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I feel closer to nature there. For example, hiking in forested trails and breathing fresh mountain air helps me relax more than a busy beach, so I usually choose mountain trips when I can.

× Yes, obviously whenever I go out, I prefer to sit near to the window because I love to explore nature.

✓ Yes, obviously whenever I go out, I prefer to sit near the window because I love exploring nature.

Multiple issues: 'near to the window' is incorrect preposition usage — use 'near the window' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'I love to explore nature' is acceptable, but 'I love exploring nature' is more natural as a gerund after 'love' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). Use gerund for general likes and correct preposition 'near'. Problems identified: 11,8.

× So I admire several things during sitting window side.

✓ So I admire many things while sitting by the window.

'during sitting window side' has several problems: wrong preposition and noun phrase order. Use 'while' for simultaneous actions instead of 'during' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 present tense/context but primary is 11 incorrect preposition). 'sitting by the window' is correct prepositional phrase (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). Also 'several things' is acceptable but 'many things' sounds more natural (Grammar Problem Type ID 14 quantifier choice). Problems identified: 11,14.

× Moreover, it provide me some peace.

✓ Moreover, it provides me with some peace.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'it provide' should be 'it provides' because third person singular requires -s (Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 27). Also missing preposition 'with' after 'provides me' or better 'provides me with' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). Problems identified: 2,27,11.

× Yes, I take several photos along with some videos.

✓ Yes, I take several photos and some videos.

'along with' is not wrong colloquially but 'and' is clearer in this list context; no tense issues. The sentence is otherwise acceptable. Change improves clarity (Grammar Problem Type ID 11 minor preposition/connector choice). Problems identified: 11.

× Then I upload on my social media sites like Instagram.

✓ Then I upload them to my social media sites like Instagram.

Missing object reference: specify what is uploaded ('them') (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 sentence structure). Preposition should be 'to' not 'on' when talking about uploading content to a platform (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). Problems identified: 26,11.

× Actually, I love to make video content during travelling.

✓ Actually, I love making video content while traveling.

After 'love' gerund 'making' is more natural than 'to make' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). Use 'while traveling' for simultaneous action and American spelling 'traveling' or British 'travelling'—either is acceptable but keep consistent (Grammar Problem Type ID 6/11). Problems identified: 8,11.

× Well, I'm a mountain lover person.

✓ Well, I'm a mountain lover.

Redundant noun phrase 'mountain lover person' is incorrect word order and redundancy; 'mountain lover' or 'a person who loves mountains' is correct (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 sentence structure and 18 adjective order). Use concise noun phrase. Problems identified: 26,18.

× I always prefer to visit mountain areas rather than go to sea.

✓ I always prefer visiting mountain areas rather than going to the sea.

Consistency of verb forms in comparisons: use parallel gerund forms 'visiting' and 'going' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). Also 'the sea' generally needs the definite article (Grammar Problem Type ID 17/22). Problems identified: 8,17.

× Actually I found a too close to nature whenever the mountains are near to me.

✓ Actually, I feel very close to nature whenever the mountains are near me.

Several problems: 'I found a too close to nature' is ungrammatical—wrong verb and article (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 5/6 tense). Use 'I feel' for a current state (present tense) (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 present tense). 'very close to nature' is correct adjective + preposition; remove unnecessary 'a' (Grammar Problem Type ID 22 article errors and 11 preposition). Also 'near to me' should be 'near me' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). Problems identified: 6,22,11,26.