Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答说得比较清楚，但存在重复、语法和流利度问题。建议：1) 开头直接回答（例如：No, I don't usually）以更简洁自然；2) 避免重复词（如“read read”）；3) 使用连词连接原因（for example, because / so）并给出具体细节（喜欢听哪类音乐或读哪本书）；4) 注意语法（listen to sounds → listen to music / read a book concerning → read a book about）。

例: No, I don't usually look out of the window when I'm travelling by bus or car. Instead, I prefer to listen to music or audiobooks because they help me relax during the journey. For example, I often listen to acoustic playlists or podcasts about linguistics, which keep me focused and make the time pass quickly.

提案: 回答有冲突（先说“not really”，又说“I do”），且有重复和不完整句子，逻辑不清。建议：1) 先给明确回答（No or Yes），避免自相矛盾；2) 用连词解释原因（because / as）并具体说明不喜欢的地方；3) 修正重复和不完整表达；4) 给一个小例子或频率词来丰富内容。

例: Not really, I seldom take photos from a car window because most of the views in my city are dominated by tall buildings and construction sites. For instance, when I travel I usually keep my phone away, unless I pass a surprisingly interesting view like a historic park or a coastal road.

提案: 回答总体清晰，表达了偏好并给出原因，但用词可更自然且避免绝对化评价（mountains are dull）。建议：1) 开头直接表明偏好（I prefer the sea）；2) 使用更丰富的词汇描述感觉（e.g. calming, refreshing）并举具体活动（walking on the beach, swimming）；3) 用更礼貌的比较方式表达不喜欢（I find mountains less appealing because...）；4) 控制句子数量，不超过五句。

例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because the open water and blue horizon feel very calming to me. I enjoy walking along the beach and listening to the waves, which helps me relax. I find mountain landscapes beautiful too, but I personally prefer the peaceful atmosphere of the seaside.

× Well, as far as I'm concerned, I do not always.

✓ Well, as far as I'm concerned, not always.

句子中原文使用了完整的否定“do not always”，在口语回答中更自然的是省略助动词，直接说“not always”或用“I don't always”后接动词。因为下一句已经明确表示不经常看风景，简化为“not always”更符合口语。建议在口语中使用更自然的简短表达：例如“I don't always look.”或直接用“Not always.”

× I do not often look at the scenery or landscape when traveling by bus or car.

✓ I don't often look at the scenery or landscape when travelling by bus or car.

句子时态为一般现在时，表示习惯。这里主要问题是拼写一致性：英国英语使用“travelling”而句中原先为“traveling”。同时口语中缩写“don't”更自然。建议保持时态一致并注意英美拼写差异。

× I will listen sounds.

✓ I listen to sounds.

句子本意是表达习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时而非将来时“I will”。此外“listen”后需接介词“to”，并且“sounds”前不需要冠词。正确句式为“I listen to sounds.” 建议学习动词短语“listen to”的用法，并用一般现在时表达习惯。

× I always listen to some music or read read a book that concerning some serious topics such as linguistics.

✓ I always listen to music or read a book concerning serious topics such as linguistics.

原句有重复词“read read”，并且动词“不定式/动名词”与并列结构应一致，使用“listen to music”与“read a book”。此外“that concerning”不自然，应用现在分词“concerning”或定语从句“that concern”。建议删去重复词，保持并列成分形式一致："listen to music or read a book concerning..." 或 "listen to music or read books that concern..."。

× Well, not really. I do. I don't often take photos of the scenery outside the car or automobile window.

✓ Well, not really. I don't often take photos of the scenery outside the car window.

句首“Not really”已表否定，不需要接“I do.”（自相矛盾）。同时“car window”已足够，“automobile window”冗余且不自然。时态使用一般现在时表示习惯，句子应统一为“I don't often take photos...” 建议避免矛盾的自我肯定，保持一致的否定回答。

× As far as I'm concerned concerned, I don't like or prefer the scenery outside the window since there are a lot of skyscrapers outside the window and it makes this.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, I don't like the scenery outside the window because there are a lot of skyscrapers, which makes it less attractive.

原句有重复单词“concerned concerned”，并且“不喜欢或更喜欢(I don't like or prefer)”表达混乱，应直接说“I don't like”。重复使用“outside the window”可简化。句尾“it makes this”不完整，缺少宾语或从句，需改为“which makes it less attractive”或具体说明感受。建议删除重复词，简化表达，使用完整的从句来解释原因。

× Well, as far as I'm concerned, I prefer the sea to the mountains since the sea is vast and blue.

✓ Well, as far as I'm concerned, I prefer the sea to the mountains because the sea is vast and blue.

时态正确，为一般现在时表偏好。将连词“since”可接受，但在口语中为避免歧义建议使用“because”更清晰。无语法错误，但可微调连词以提高表达清晰度。建议在书面或正式答题中用“because”来表原因。

× So I like the scenery of the sea, which gives me a sense of peacefulness and tranquility.

✓ So I like the scenery of the sea, which gives me a sense of peace and tranquility.

“peacefulness”与“tranquility”意义重复且“不太常见”的搭配，常用短语为“peace and tranquility”。建议使用更地道的搭配“peace and tranquility”。

× On the other hand, I don't like the mountains since it is dull and tedious for me.

✓ On the other hand, I don't like the mountains since they are dull and tedious for me.

“the mountains”是复数，后续代词或动词应使用复数形式。原句使用单数代词“it is”，与主语不一致，违反主谓一致。建议将代词和动词改为复数“they are”。