Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to add one or two specific details. Also correct common errors (verb forms, articles, and prepositions) and keep the answer within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes. I usually sit by the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy looking at the natural scenery. For example, I like watching forests and fields pass by, which helps me relax during long journeys.

提案: Answer directly and naturally, use correct collocations (take photos, sit by the window), and give one specific supporting detail or example using a linking word. Avoid vague phrases and repetition.

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car window because I like to capture interesting views. For instance, I always photograph sunsets or unusual buildings when I travel, and later I share them with friends.

提案: Give a clear, concise preference statement, correct grammar (use prefer X to Y; avoid extra articles), and provide a specific reason or example connected by a linking word. Also avoid repeating similar words (fond/very) and use natural expressions for fear.

例: I prefer mountains to the sea because I enjoy hiking and the fresh air. For example, I like climbing trails and staying in mountain cabins, whereas I feel uncomfortable on boats and get seasick easily.

× Yes, whenever I traveling by bus or car I usually prefer to sit on window seat because I like to see nature view.

✓ Yes, whenever I travel by bus or car, I usually prefer to sit in the window seat because I like to see the natural scenery.

The verb form 'traveling' is incorrect after 'I' for simple present; use 'travel'. Also use prepositions 'in the window seat' and article 'the' with 'window seat'. 'Nature view' is non-native; use 'natural scenery' or 'the view of nature'. Add commas for clarity.

× Because I'm a very addicted to nature.

✓ Because I'm very addicted to nature.

The structure 'a very addicted' is incorrect: 'addicted' is an adjective that does not take an indefinite article in this context. Remove 'a'. Alternatively use 'I am very fond of nature' which is more natural.

× Whenever I go to outside I always prefer to sit on window side.

✓ Whenever I go outside, I always prefer to sit on the window side.

Use 'go outside' (not 'go to outside'). Add comma after the subordinate clause. Use the article 'the' with 'window side' to specify the location.

× Yes, I am very fond of the picture.

✓ Yes, I am very fond of taking pictures.

'Fond of the picture' is awkward and singular; the intended meaning is enjoying photography or pictures generally. Use 'fond of taking pictures' or 'fond of pictures' depending on meaning.

× Whenever I sit on window, I prefer to see picture or scenery on the outside because I love to capture the moment.

✓ Whenever I sit by the window, I prefer to look at the scenery outside because I love to capture the moment.

'Sit on window' is incorrect; use 'sit by the window' or 'in the window seat'. 'See picture or scenery on the outside' is ungrammatical: use 'look at the scenery outside'. Improve word order and preposition use.

× I prefer to the mountains rather than sea because I am a very fond of the trip on mountains, but I am a very afraid to go on sea.

✓ I prefer the mountains rather than the sea because I am very fond of mountain trips, but I am very afraid of going out to sea.

Remove 'to' after 'prefer' when followed directly by a noun: use 'prefer the mountains'. Add 'the' before 'sea'. 'A very fond' is incorrect; use 'very fond of' without 'a'. 'Trip on mountains' is unnatural; use 'mountain trips'. 'Afraid to go on sea' is wrong preposition: use 'afraid of going out to sea'.