Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve fluency by removing short fragments and tightening sentences; add one specific example to make the answer more vivid. Use linking words (for example, so, because) to connect ideas. Keep answer under five sentences.

例: Yes, I often look out the window when I'm traveling by bus or car, especially in a new city because it helps me relax and learn about the area. For example, on my last trip I saw a small riverside market that I later visited. I also find that watching the scenery passes the time and sometimes gives me ideas for future trips.

提案: Good content and vocabulary; make it more concise and add a brief detail about how you take photos (e.g., phone, timing) to show specificity. Link reasons clearly with because/so.

例: Yes, I often photograph scenery from the car window, usually with my phone because it's quick and convenient. If the light and composition are right, I save the best shots to share on social media or keep as memories to look back on later.

提案: Strong answer with specific reasons and a vivid example. To reach higher score, compress slightly and add a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly. Avoid repeating similar adjectives (breathtaking/unforgettable) too closely.

例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and exploring natural trails where the scenery is peaceful and fresh. For example, watching the sunrise from a mountaintop after a short hike is incredibly rewarding and helps me relax away from crowded beaches.

× For me.

✓ For me, it really helps me relax and pass the time, and sometimes I spot interesting things or places that I would like to check out in the future.

The fragment 'For me.' is a sentence without a verb and is therefore incomplete (Grammar problem type ID 23 and 26). It should be attached to the previous sentence or expanded into a full clause. Suggested improvement: combine it with the preceding sentence using a comma and continue with a verb phrase to make a complete sentence.'

× when I'm traveling by bus or car

✓ when I'm travelling by bus or car

The transcript uses American spelling 'traveling' while elsewhere context may accept British 'travelling'. This is not a grammar error in the provided list, so treat as style consistency. If using British English, use 'travelling'. Ensure consistent spelling throughout the response.'

× Sometimes the view is just too amazing not to take a picture, and I enjoy sharing these photos on social media or looking back at them later to relieve those moments.

✓ Sometimes the view is just too amazing not to photograph, and I enjoy sharing these photos on social media or looking back at them later to relive those moments.

The phrase 'not to take a picture' is colloquial but acceptable; however, 'relieve those moments' is incorrect word choice: 'relieve' means to reduce pain or burden. The correct verb is 'relive' meaning to experience again. This is an incorrect use of verb/adverb/adjective (Grammar problem type ID 13) and sentence structure (ID 26). Suggestion: use 'photograph' or keep 'take a picture' and replace 'relieve' with 'relive'.'