Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Migliorare la chiarezza e la naturalezza evitando ripetizioni e riempitivi ("uh", "when I'm"). Usare una frase tematica diretta, poi aggiungere 1-2 dettagli specifici collegati con connettori (ad es. "because", "for example"). Correggere verbi e strutture: "when I drive" (non "when I'm drive"). Mantenere al massimo 3-5 frasi concise.

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car, bus or plane because I enjoy watching the passing scenery. For example, when I drive I like to observe the streets and buildings to get a sense of the neighbourhood, and on longer trips I focus on the landscape to relax.

提案: Buona risposta diretta con struttura chiara. Per migliorare, usare vocaboli più appropriati ("take pictures" non "taking picture") e collegatori più fluidi; aggiungere un dettaglio specifico o una breve ragione per rafforzare la risposta. Evitare ripetizioni e mantenere la risposta entro 3 frasi.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos from the car window, but it depends on the location. For example, I love photographing rural landscapes and mountain views because the scenery is more dramatic, whereas urban scenes rarely inspire me to stop and take pictures.

提案: Riscrivere in modo più naturale e correggere errori lessicali e grammaticali (ad es. "I love the sea", "I like swimming and boating" o "I enjoy the vast view"). Dare due motivazioni collegate con connettori ("because", "so") e usare vocaboli pertinenti ("immensity" può essere "vastness"). Mantenere 2–3 frasi concise e senza riempitivi.",

例: I prefer the sea because I dislike cold weather and enjoy swimming. I also love the vast, open views and sometimes enjoy boating, which makes seaside holidays relaxing and refreshing.

× Yeah, I usually, uh, look how the look out the window at, at the scenery when I, when I'm traveling by car or even by bus, uh, or even by plane, because I really love to watch outside, uh, when I'm drive, when I'm traveling by car, I love to, uh, watch the, the street, uh, to know where.

✓ Yes, I usually look out the window at the scenery when I'm traveling by car, bus, or even by plane, because I really love watching outside to see where I am.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: redundant phrases, interruptions, and incorrect verb forms. Simplify by removing filler words (uh), combining repeated items (car or bus or plane -> car, bus, or even plane), use the gerund watching after 'love', and correct 'when I'm drive' to 'when I'm driving' or rephrase to 'to see where I am'. Suggest practicing concise sentences, removing fillers, and using consistent verb forms (present continuous for traveling).

× If I'm traveling, for example in the countryside or in the mountains, I love taking picture, but in other places, not so much.

✓ If I'm traveling, for example in the countryside or in the mountains, I love taking pictures, but in other places, not so much.

The error is a count noun and verb+ing form: 'taking picture' should be 'taking pictures' because 'picture' needs plural when unspecified. Use the gerund 'taking' correctly with plural 'pictures'. Suggest remembering that 'take pictures' is the common collocation and to make nouns plural when referring to multiple or unspecified items.

× I absolutely prefer the sea because I hate the winter and the cold days.

✓ I absolutely prefer the sea because I hate winter and cold days.

The issue is use of definite article with non-specific general nouns: 'the winter' and 'the cold days' are unnatural here. In general statements about seasons and days, English often omits 'the'. Suggest using 'hate winter' and 'hate cold days' for natural expression.

× I love sea because I really love to swim and to some bait and the view of the immensity of the sea.

✓ I love the sea because I really love to swim, to sunbathe, and the view of the sea's immensity.

Multiple problems: 'I love sea' needs the definite article 'the sea'. 'to some bait' is incorrect; likely intended 'to sunbathe'. Also awkward phrasing 'the view of the immensity of the sea' is better as 'the view of the sea's immensity'. Suggest learning collocations (love the sea, sunbathe) and possessive forms for descriptive phrases.