Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and accurate: begin with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (use present simple for habitual actions), and complete your idea. Add one specific detail and a linking word. Aim for 2–4 sentences under five-sentence limit.

例: Yes, I do. I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the changing landscape helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching fields and small villages pass by, which gives me a peaceful feeling.

提案: Be clearer and more specific: state frequency and a concise reason, avoid unclear references (like "this monkey"). Use linking words to connect ideas and correct tense and prepositions. Keep it within two or three sentences.

例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, especially when I travel through rural areas. For example, once I saw a group of monkeys by the roadside in a forest, so I stopped briefly to take clear photos.

提案: Start with a direct answer, give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and varied vocabulary, and avoid repeating the same phrase. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and ensure subject–verb agreement.

例: I prefer the mountains because I find the scenery and the cool climate very relaxing. For instance, I enjoy hiking on quiet trails and breathing fresh air, which helps me unwind more than a busy beach would.

× 'Yes, I used to. I look out throughout the window to see the scenery that is outside when I'm travelling on the bus or car. It gives me calm and peaceful thought when I.'

✓ 'Yes, I used to. I look out through the window to see the scenery outside when I'm travelling by bus or car. It gives me calm and peaceful thoughts.'

'Present tense and word choice errors: "throughout the window" is incorrect; use "through the window" (preposition error but tied to present-tense phrasing). "that is outside" is unnecessary; "outside" suffices. "when I'm travelling on the bus or car" should be "travelling by bus or car" (preposition use). "It gives me calm and peaceful thought" should be plural "thoughts" to match meaning. Suggestion: use simple present/present continuous consistently and choose correct prepositions and countable/plural nouns.'

× 'Yes, I take photos of the scenery when I'm traveling in the car or bus. I mostly take photos of this monkey by this side of this road while going through the forest and also seeing that I take photo.'

✓ 'Yes, I take photos of the scenery when I'm travelling by car or bus. I mostly take photos of monkeys by the side of the road when we go through the forest.'

'Present tense and article/pronoun errors: use consistent British spelling "travelling" if following earlier usage; "in the car or bus" should be "by car or bus" (preposition). "this monkey by this side of this road" is incorrect article/pronoun and singular/plural choice — use "monkeys by the side of the road" or "a monkey by the side of the road" depending on meaning; plural is likely. "while going through the forest and also seeing that I take photo" is ungrammatical—simplify to "when we go through the forest." Also ensure "photo" -> "photos" to match plural.'

× 'I like the mountains better, so I prefer mountains because the scenery and the climate it gives is so relaxing and peaceful.'

✓ 'I like the mountains better, so I prefer the mountains because the scenery and the climate they offer are very relaxing and peaceful.'

'Present tense and subject-pronoun agreement: repeat the article "the" for "the mountains." "the scenery and the climate it gives" uses singular pronoun "it" for two nouns; use plural pronoun "they." Also "is so relaxing and peaceful" should agree in number with "scenery and climate," so use "are." Use clearer verb "offer" instead of "give." '

× 'The climate in the mountains are very cold and it gives so relaxing.'

✓ 'The climate in the mountains is very cold and it is very relaxing.'

'Subject-verb agreement / singular-plural issue: "The climate" is singular, so use "is" rather than "are." "it gives so relaxing" is ungrammatical: use an adjective with a linking verb, e.g., "it is very relaxing," or rephrase "the climate is very cold and very relaxing." Suggestion: match verb number to subject and use appropriate adjective forms.'