Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えは直接で分かりやすいですが、時制の一致や語法の誤り、冗長な表現が見られます。具体的には「I look」や「I saw」が混在しているので過去の話なら過去形で統一し、同じ語（scenery）が繰り返され過ぎています。また、語彙の幅を広げ、接続語（for example, when といった）を自然に使って文をつなぐとより流暢に聞こえます。改善すべき点を踏まえ、文は3〜4文以内に収め、具体的な描写（色、形、天候など）を加えてください。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking out of the window to see new landscapes I’ve never seen before. For example, when I visited Canada last year, I watched snow-capped mountains and deep blue lakes pass by, which felt truly breathtaking.

提案: 回答は意図が分かりますが、語法と文法の誤りが目立ちます（"look back photographers" や不自然な表現）。「record them later」はやや不明瞭なので「to look at them later」などに直すと良いです。また、具体性を高めるためにどんな被写体を撮るのか（建物、風景、光景のどの部分）を一つ示すと効果的です。接続詞で理由と例をはっきり分け、文は簡潔に。

例: Yes, I often do. I like to photograph interesting views so I can look at the pictures later. For instance, when I travel I usually shoot colourful city streets or dramatic mountain ridges from the window.

提案: 理由を述べており内容は適切ですが、語順・時制の誤りや冗長なフレーズ（"makes me it made me"）があるため減点になります。固有名詞の前の冠詞や前置詞の誤用（"climbed mount to Kinka"）にも注意してください。より自然にするには、簡潔な主張の後に具体的なエピソードを一文で補足し、時制を統一してください。

例: I prefer the mountains because hiking helps me relax and clear my mind. For example, when I climbed Mount Kinka last spring, the panoramic views and fresh air made me feel incredibly happy.

× For example, when I visited Canada, I look out the window at the scenery and I saw very, very beautiful mountains and seas.

✓ For example, when I visited Canada, I looked out the window at the scenery and I saw very, very beautiful mountains and seas.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'visited' and 'saw' are past, but 'look' is present. Use past tense 'looked' to match the narrative. Improve consistency by keeping the same tense for related actions. Suggested study: practice past simple verb forms and keeping consistent tense in narratives.

× Yes, I do, because I want to take photos of the scenery and record them later.

✓ Yes, I do, because I want to take photos of the scenery and record them later.

This sentence is grammatical; no change needed. 'Record' is correctly used as base form after 'want to'. No past participle required. Keep infinitive structure 'want to + verb'. Suggested study: review verb patterns after 'want to'.

× For example, I sometimes look back photographers which I took when I traveled abroad.

✓ For example, I sometimes look back at photographs that I took when I traveled abroad.

Errors: 'look back photographers' lacks the preposition 'at' and 'photographers' (people who take photos) is the wrong noun; use 'photographs' (the pictures). 'Which' is grammatically acceptable but 'that' is more natural for defining clauses in this context. Correct preposition and noun choice are needed. Suggested study: practice common collocations like 'look back at', difference between 'photographer' and 'photograph', and relative pronoun usage.

× I prefer the mountains because climbing mountains makes me feel so relaxed and comfortable.

✓ I prefer the mountains because climbing mountains makes me feel so relaxed and comfortable.

This sentence is acceptable as written: 'mountains' plural and verb 'makes' agrees with the gerund 'climbing mountains' (singular concept). No change required. Suggested study: review gerund subjects and verb agreement.

× For example, when I climbed mount to Kinka, the scenery was very beautiful and makes me it made me feel so happy.

✓ For example, when I climbed Mount Kinka, the scenery was very beautiful and it made me feel so happy.

Multiple issues: 'mount to Kinka' is incorrect word order and preposition; correct name is 'Mount Kinka'. The clause mixes present 'makes' with past 'climbed' and 'was'—use past 'made' to match. Extra words 'it' and wrong order 'makes me it made me' cause confusion. Fix by using past tense 'made' and removing redundant words. Suggested study: practice correct naming of landmarks, tense consistency in past narratives, and eliminating redundant pronouns.