Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Người nói cần trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn; giảm tiếng ừ, à và sửa ngữ pháp. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó đưa 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh câu dài lộn xộn và dùng liên từ phù hợp (for example, because, so) để liên kết ý. Ví dụ: sửa lỗi động từ và danh từ (travelling is an opportunity; capture the landscape), dùng từ vựng phù hợp (scenery, lifestyle, destination).

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching the changing scenery because it helps me imagine what life is like in that area. For example, seeing small farms or busy streets gives me a better sense of the local culture and what my destination will be like.

提案: Câu trả lời tương đối rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và thứ tự từ (I also a lot some of the best shots). Nên dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể kèm liên từ (because, so, especially). Tránh từ dư thừa và sửa cấu trúc: say "I take" hoặc "I often take"; "I use some of the best shots on social media". Nên nhắm tối đa 3 câu.

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I like to preserve memories of my trips. I collect different landscapes and sometimes post the best shots on social media for fun, especially during long drives when the lighting is good.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (advantages, swimming in Simon? get a ton? diving into the city?). Câu nên nêu rõ lý do cụ thể (I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming, sailing and snorkeling) và dùng ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh cụm từ không rõ nghĩa; dùng liên từ để nối ý (but, because, and).

例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy swimming and water activities. For example, I often go sailing with friends, take photos on the beach, and sometimes go snorkeling to see marine life.

× From my perspective, I'm traveling is 1 instrument so that I think that, uh, looking out the scenery to capturing all this landscape is umm, essential because I want to see, uh, the beautiful of my destination and, uh, understand the control, the lifestyle in my new traveling destination.

✓ From my perspective, traveling is an experience, so I think that looking out at the scenery to capture the landscape is essential because I want to see the beauty of my destination and understand the culture and lifestyle of my new travel destination.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: redundant words, incorrect phrases and unclear meaning. 'I'm traveling is 1 instrument' is ungrammatical and was replaced with 'traveling is an experience.' 'Looking out the scenery to capturing' mixes infinitive and gerund forms and incorrect preposition; corrected to 'looking out at the scenery to capture the landscape.' 'the beautiful of my destination' should be 'the beauty of my destination.' 'understand the control, the lifestyle' likely intended 'understand the culture and lifestyle.' Suggestion: simplify ideas into clear clauses, use correct prepositions ('look out at'), choose consistent verb forms (infinitive 'to capture') and replace unclear words with accurate vocabulary.

× I take photos of the scenery outside the car. I do this because I want to turn the moment into something lasting and I enjoy collecting different landscapes. I also a lot some of the best shots to make social media for fun, especially on long drive when the light is nice.

✓ I take photos of the scenery outside the car. I do this because I want to turn the moment into something lasting and I enjoy collecting different landscapes. I also post some of the best shots on social media for fun, especially on long drives when the light is nice.

Errors include missing verb and incorrect noun forms: 'I also a lot some of the best shots to make social media' lacks a main verb and uses wrong prepositions. Corrected to 'I also post some of the best shots on social media.' 'on long drive' needs plural or article: 'on long drives.' Suggestion: ensure each clause has a verb, use correct collocations ('post on social media', 'long drives'), and keep verb forms consistent.

× For me, both the mountains and the sea have advantage, but I prefer the sea because I love swimming in Simon.

✓ For me, both the mountains and the sea have advantages, but I prefer the sea because I love swimming in summer.

'Have advantage' is incorrect; use plural 'advantages' or 'an advantage.' 'Swimming in Simon' seems to be a typo; likely 'swimming in summer' or a place name. Corrected to 'swimming in summer.' Suggestion: check countability of nouns ('advantage' vs 'advantages') and fix typos or proper nouns appropriately.

× I like to go to the beach to swim, take photos and get a ton.

✓ I like to go to the beach to swim, take photos and get a tan.

'Get a ton' is a typo; intended phrase is 'get a tan.' Suggestion: proofread for similar-sounding words and confirm intended collocations ('get a tan' means to sunbathe).

× I also like a sailing with my friends and diving into the city.

✓ I also like sailing with my friends and diving in the sea.

'Like a sailing' has an unnecessary article 'a' before gerund; should be 'like sailing.' 'Diving into the city' is semantically odd; if referring to scuba diving, use 'diving in the sea' or 'diving with friends.' Suggestion: remove incorrect articles before gerunds and choose prepositions that match the activity ('diving in' for water).