Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接且相关，但存在重复与语法问题。建议：1) 开头给出更自然的主题句，例如“I often do.” 2) 用1-2句具体描述支持观点（地点/时间/感受），避免重复“love”。3) 修正语法与数的一致性（例如“rabbits and dogs”）。4) 使用连接词使句子连贯（e.g. “for example”, “especially”）。

例: I often do. I enjoy watching the passing countryside, especially the green trees and farm animals. For example, when I travel through rural areas I often see rabbits and dogs running near the road, which always cheers me up.

提案: 回答能传达意思但口语中犹豫多、时态与人称错误。建议：1) 减少语气词与犹豫，保持流畅。2) 使用正确时态和主谓一致（例如“I don't usually do that”）。3) 用一两句解释原因并加上连接词（e.g. “because”, “so”）。

例: No, I don't usually take photos of scenery from the car because I prefer to enjoy the moment. For instance, I find it more relaxing to watch the landscape pass by than to take pictures that might turn out blurry.

提案: 回答清晰并包含具体信息，但句子可以更紧凑、用词更地道。建议：1) 首句直接回答，随后用1-2句具体解释原因或举例。2) 注意用词搭配，例如“beautiful scenery”（不可数），用“a lot of”或“many”描述数量时与名词一致。3) 用连接词增强逻辑（e.g. “because”, “for example”）。

例: I prefer the mountains because I love hiking and peaceful views. For example, when I travel with my boyfriend to Sichuan, we enjoy the numerous peaks and the calm atmosphere among the hills.

× I usually look out the window at the scenery.

✓ I usually look out of the window at the scenery.

此处介词搭配更自然，英语中常用 look out of the window 或 look out the window 两种表达，但在本句为了与后文结构一致，使用 look out of the window 更常见。建议记住常见搭配：look out of the window（从窗户向外看）。

× I love the green trees and I love some animals.

✓ I love the green trees, and I love animals.

原句中使用 some animals 在此语境下显得不自然。表示喜欢动物时直接用 'love animals' 更简洁。将两个并列句用逗号和连词连接更符合书面表达。建议去掉不必要的限定词，使表达更自然。

× For example, I used to look at rabbit and the dog.

✓ For example, I used to look at rabbits and dogs.

原句中 rabbit 和 the dog 的单复数和冠词使用不一致。此处描述一般性举例，应使用复数 rabbits 和 dogs，不需要定冠词 the。建议把泛指事物用复数形式或不定冠词。

× Actually, I'm not uh, do that because I usually, uh, loves to watch the beautiful scenery.

✓ Actually, I don't do that because I usually love to watch the beautiful scenery.

主语是第一人称 I，谓语动词不应加 -s。原句中出现 'I'm not do that' 的结构错误，应改为否定一般现在时 'I don't do that'；另外 'loves' 应为 'love'。建议复习一般现在时的第三人称单数变化规则（only he/she/it 加 -s）。

× Uh, sometimes I forgot to take photos with them.

✓ Uh, sometimes I forget to take photos of them.

句子时态与语境不一致。说习惯性动作应使用一般现在时 'sometimes I forget' 而非过去时 'forgot'。此外，短语 'take photos with them' 含义是与它们合影，若想表达拍摄它们应为 'take photos of them'。建议根据语境选择正确时态并注意介词搭配。

× I enjoy the moment.

✓ I enjoy the moment.

句子本身语法正确，但在语境中更自然的表达为 'I enjoy the moment'（保留原句）。建议可扩展为 'I enjoy the moment when I travel' 以提供更多信息。

× I usually travel with my boyfriend in Sichuan province.

✓ I usually travel with my boyfriend in Sichuan Province.

句子语法正确，但 'Province' 在专有名词中通常大写以表明地名，且可省略 'province' 直接说 'Sichuan'。建议写作时地名首字母大写：Sichuan Province 或 simply Sichuan。

× There are so many mountains with beautiful sceneries.

✓ There are so many mountains with beautiful scenery.

scenery 通常为不可数名词，不用复数形式 'sceneries'。此外，介词 with 在此用法可以保留，但重点是将 scenery 改为不可数形式。建议记住不可数名词用法并避免不必要的复数。