Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答自然且相关，但存在语法小错误和冗余。可以把句子更简洁并修正时态和介词用法，控制在不超过五句内，并用连接词稍作扩展。建议把“while I traveling”改为“while I’m travelling”或“when I travel”，并去掉重复的“by bus or by car”之一或改为“by bus or car”。

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy seeing changing landscapes because they help me relax, and I especially like spotting small towns and fields along the way.

提案: 回答表达了喜好但有拼写和搭配错误，且略显冗长。应注意拼写（relaxment→relaxation），改进搭配（take photos of the scenery/out the window，而不是“outside the window or just out my door”不够清晰），并使用连接词说明原因或具体场景。

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery through the car window because it captures moments I like. For example, I take pictures of sunrise or interesting buildings, and this gives me a feeling of relaxation.

提案: 回答清晰有理由，但表达可以更自然精炼。可把“more willing to go nearby the sea”改为“I prefer the sea to the mountains”或“I prefer going to the seaside”，并用一两个具体细节支撑，例如解释喜欢海边散步的原因或举例。

例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I love walking along the shore. The coastline is especially beautiful in summer, and I enjoy the fresh air and watching people sailing or swimming.

× Yes, I really enjoy watching those different scenes outside the window while I traveling by bus or by car.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy watching those different scenes outside the window while I am traveling by bus or by car.

错误类别：动词 + -ing 形式（进行时) 。原句中 while 后面的动词缺少助动词 am，正确的现在进行时结构为 be + V-ing。建议在 while 描述同时发生的动作时使用正确的进行时："while I am traveling"。

× Yes, I'm really keen on taking a bunch of photos outside the window or just out my door and it gives me a sense of relaxment and pleasure.

✓ Yes, I'm really keen on taking a bunch of photos out of the window or just outside my door, and it gives me a sense of relaxation and pleasure.

错误类别：现在分词/短语使用及拼写。原句中 "out my door" 结构不自然，应为 "outside my door" 或 "out of the window"；"relaxment" 拼写错误，应为 "relaxation"。此外两个并列分句用逗号连接更自然。建议注意固定短语（out of the window / outside my door）和名词拼写。

× I'm more willing to go nearby the sea rather than go to the high mountains because I really enjoy walking along the sea bank and the coast is very beautiful in summer.

✓ I'm more willing to go to the nearby sea rather than go to the high mountains because I really enjoy walking along the seashore and the coast is very beautiful in summer.

错误类别：介词使用不当。原句中 "go nearby the sea" 介词位置错误，应为 "go to the nearby sea" 或直接说 "go to the sea nearby"；另外常用搭配是 "seashore" 或 "shore"，而不是 "sea bank"。建议使用常见搭配并把介词放在正确位置："go to the nearby sea" 或 "go to the sea nearby"。