Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答案要更自然并且语法正确。先给出直接回答，然后用一到两句补充具体细节并使用连接词。注意时态和固定搭配，例如 say “when I travel by bus or car” 和 “it relaxes me” 或 “I feel refreshed”。避免多余词汇。

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find the scenery beautiful. For example, seeing green fields and small villages relaxes me and helps me feel refreshed during a long journey.

提案: 注意时态和表达清晰。先说是否拍照，然后用连接词说明原因和频率。避免口语填充词并修正词序，例如 “I often take photos” 而不是 “I took photos ... very often”。提到社交平台时可简单说明用途。

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I like sharing moments on social media. For instance, I usually post pictures on WeChat to show friends the places I visit.

提案: 回答要更简洁并注意句子结构和词汇搭配。先直接回答偏好，然后用一两句具体理由并用连接词。修正重复词和固定搭配，例如 “the fresh sea air” 和 “the peaceful atmosphere” 或 “the soft sand”。

例: I prefer the sea because I love the fresh sea air and the peaceful atmosphere. The soft sand and the sound of waves help me relax, so I often choose beaches for my holidays.

× Yes, I often look out the window by traveling or by car because I think the scenery is beautiful which makes me relaxed in the refreshed.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window when travelling by bus or by car because I think the scenery is beautiful, which makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

错误类型：动词+ -ing 以及句子结构问题。原句中用“by traveling or by car”不符合习惯表达，询问是“when travelling by bus or car”（在乘车时）。此外“makes me relaxed in the refreshed”结构混乱，应改为“makes me feel relaxed and refreshed”。建议：用 when + 动词-ing 表示在……时；用 feel + 形容词 表达感受；并用 and 连接两个形容词。

× Yeah, I took photos of the scenery outside of very often because I like to post it on my WeChat and my friends circle I like to share it on.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside because I like to post them on my WeChat Moments and share them with my friends.

错误类型：过去时使用不当和代词、短语错误。原句用“took”与句中其他现在时态不一致，应为一般现在时“take”表示习惯行为；“outside of very often”词序错误；“post it”中it与photos（复数）不一致，应为 them；“my friends circle”是中文直译，应为 WeChat Moments 或 just 'my friends'. 建议：保持时态一致（习惯用现在时），修正代词数（them），调整短语顺序。

× I prefer the sea because I think it's beautiful and the the fresh, the smell of the sea makes me relaxed in the peaceful.

✓ I prefer the sea because I think it's beautiful and fresh; the smell of the sea makes me feel relaxed and peaceful.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用不当和冗余词。原句有重复“the the fresh”，表达不连贯；“makes me relaxed in the peaceful”语法错误，应该用“makes me feel relaxed and peaceful”。建议：删除重复词，用形容词直接修饰sea（beautiful and fresh），用 make/feel + 形容词 表达感受，并用 and 连接两个形容词。

× I like plain sands on the sea too.

✓ I also like the wide sandy beaches by the sea.

错误类型：介词使用不当与名词搭配。原句“plain sands on the sea”搭配不自然，英语中常说 'sandy beaches' 或 'the sand on the beach'；“on the sea”用于海面（船在海上），不适用于沙滩。建议：用 'beaches by the sea' 或 'the sand on the beach' 来表达喜欢海边的沙子。