Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子结构不够连贯，存在断句与重复。建议：在答题时先一句简短直接的主题句，再用1–2句补充细节并使用连接词（例如 because, so, when）使语流更顺畅。注意保持句子不超过五句并避免重复表达。练习时可把碎片化句子合并为完整句并控制语速。

例: Yes, I do. I often enjoy looking out of the car window because the scenery is calming and beautiful, so it helps me relax when I travel.

提案: 表达含糊且断断续续，语序和停顿影响可理解性。建议：先给出直接回答（Yes/No），随后用连接词（for example, sometimes, when）补充具体情景和例子，尽量避免在一句话中多处停顿。可以练习将零散片段组合成完整句并使用更准确的词汇（e.g. fields, coastline）。

例: Not usually, but sometimes I take photos when I see something special, for example the sea or wide green fields, because those views are worth keeping.

提案: 答案重复且有语法问题（more calmer, it also so beautiful），句子不完整。建议：先说出偏好并给出2个具体理由，用正确语法表达比较和感受（e.g. calmer → calmer OR more relaxed）。使用连接词（because, also, for example）但避免堆叠。可练习将理由按逻辑顺序组织并用完整句结束。

例: I prefer the sea because it makes me feel more relaxed and comfortable. It is very beautiful, and for example, being by the ocean helps me reduce stress.

× Yes, actually, I look. At the scenery, when I am traveling by the car.

✓ Yes, actually, I look at the scenery when I am traveling by car.

句子里“look. At the scenery,”被错误地断开，并且介词短语位置不当。此外“by the car”中定冠词“the”不需要。应将句子合并为一个完整句，并使用固定表达“travel by car”。建议将断句合并，去掉多余的“the”。

× Because it's so calming and wonderful for me.

✓ Because it's so calming and wonderful for me.

本句语法结构正确，但与上一句连贯性差。可保持原句。此处无需改动，仅建议将其与前句合并或用连词自然衔接："...traveling by car because it's..."。

× It makes me more happy.

✓ It makes me happier.

比较级结构错误。形容词"happy"的比较级应为"happier"，而不是在前面加副词"more"。建议使用正确的比较级形式。

× And.

✓ And I feel relaxed.

句子不完整，只有连接词"And"没有主语和谓语，属于句子结构错误。建议补充完整内容，使其成为完整句子，例如说明感受："And I feel relaxed."（并且我感到放松）。

× Actually, I don't usually take photos of the scenery outside the car. Window, but, sometimes when, for example, I see, the sea.

✓ Actually, I don't usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window, but sometimes, for example, when I see the sea, I do take photos.

原句有多处断句和错误的词位（"car. Window,"），导致句子破碎。需将句子合并并使用正确的名词短语"car window"。保持时态为一般现在时，连接词"but sometimes"放在合适位置以表达转折。

× I take photos or, think green fields.

✓ I take photos — for example, of green fields.

原句"or, think green fields"不符合英语表达，可能想说举例说明。应使用短破折号或逗号并改为介词短语"of green fields"来说明拍摄对象。建议用"for example, of green fields"更清晰。

× Actually, I prefer the sea because it makes me more calmer and comfortable.

✓ Actually, I prefer the sea because it makes me calmer and more comfortable.

比较级和副词排列错误。"more calmer"是冗余错误，应使用单一比较级"calmer"。两个形容词并列时用"and"连接，并在需要时在第二个前加"more"（如果该形容词需要比较级），因此用"calmer and more comfortable"。

× And it also so beautiful.

✓ And it is also so beautiful.

缺少系动词"is"导致句子不完整。应补上系动词构成完整的系表结构："it is beautiful"。另外可保留副词"so"以强调。

× And for example, when I go, I feel, less stressed and.

✓ For example, when I go, I feel less stressed and relaxed.

原句结尾处断开，缺少并列成分，导致句子不完整。需补充完整的并列形容词"relaxed"或其他感受，移除多余逗号以保持自然流畅。