Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise, correct grammar, and provide one specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief reason or example using a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like “feel like special.”

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching the scenery from the window because it helps me relax and gives me a preview of the place I’m visiting. For example, on a trip to the countryside I noticed local farms and small villages, which made me excited to explore them.

提案: Make the answer slightly shorter and more natural, fix repetition, and add a specific detail about what you photograph and why. Use one linking word to connect idea and example.

例: Yes, I often take photos from the window because they capture moments I can’t recreate later. For instance, I like to photograph interesting landscapes or unusual buildings so I can remember the route and the mood of the journey.

提案: Answer directly naming your preference, correct the vague phrase “prefer to see it,” remove filler words like “uh,” and add one specific supporting detail or brief comparison. Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: I prefer the sea because I love swimming and relaxing on the beach. Moreover, the sound of the waves and the fresh air help me unwind, whereas mountain holidays can feel too active for relaxation.

× I like looking scenery of the travel destination from the window of the bus or car because it makes me feel like special and relaxing.

✓ I like looking at the scenery of the travel destination from the window of the bus or car because it makes me feel special and relaxed.

Errors: missing preposition 'at' after 'looking' (verb + -ing usually requires 'look at' for objects), incorrect use of 'like' before 'special' and 'relaxing' and incorrect adjective forms. 'Feel like special and relaxing' is ungrammatical; use 'feel special and relaxed'. Suggestion: Use 'looking at' to correctly link the verb to its object, and use adjectives that describe the subject's feelings ('special', 'relaxed'). Note: 'relaxed' is the correct adjective to describe a feeling, not 'relaxing', which describes something that causes relaxation.

× Yes, I enjoy taking photos from the window when I travel somewhere because it captures a special moment and after taking those photos back home, I can recall the memories of the experiences.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking photos from the window when I travel because they capture special moments, and after I bring those photos back home I can recall the memories of the experiences.

Errors: pronoun-antecedent and subject reference issues. The singular verb 'captures' does not agree with the plural subject 'photos' (subject-verb agreement), and the clause 'after taking those photos back home' lacks a clear subject. Correction uses 'they capture' to match plural 'photos' and adds 'I' in the second clause for clarity. Also 'somewhere' is vague; 'when I travel' fits the question's general tense better. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree in number with their subjects and include an explicit subject after time clauses for clarity.

× I prefer to see it because I love swimming and spending time on the beach helps me relax and feel refreshed.

✓ I prefer the sea because I love swimming, and spending time on the beach helps me relax and feel refreshed.

Error: the pronoun 'it' is unclear—examiner asked 'mountains or the sea?' so 'it' should be replaced with the specific noun 'the sea'. Also improved sentence flow by adding a comma and keeping parallel structure. Suggestion: Use a clear noun instead of an unclear pronoun when contrasting explicit options.

× I also enjoy the sound of the waves and the fresh air, uh, which makes a seaside holiday more enjoyable for me.

✓ I also enjoy the sound of the waves and the fresh air, which make a seaside holiday more enjoyable for me.

Error: subject-verb agreement and filler word. The relative clause 'which makes' refers to two plural nouns ('the sound of the waves and the fresh air'), so the verb should be plural 'make'. Also remove the filler 'uh' in written answers. Suggestion: Match the verb number to the compound subject and avoid spoken fillers in formal responses.