Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体清晰，但存在时态与细节问题。首先问题是一般习惯，用一般现在时更自然（例如“I do look”或“I usually look”）。其次回答略显啰嗦并有重复信息，建议用一到两句话直接给出主题句，然后用一两句具体说明（如什么时候、看哪些景色或感受）。另外注意用词精确，如用“avoid boredom”或“pass the time”。

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I do this to avoid boredom and sometimes to notice interesting details like old buildings or countryside farms that I wouldn't see otherwise.

提案: 回答直接且合适，但可更简洁并加入具体原因或例子。例如说明何时会拍照、什么情况下选择不拍照，或描述一次具体经历，使用连接词使逻辑更连贯。注意避免重复表达（如“enjoy with my eyes”与“completely take in”意思相近）。

例: No, I rarely take photos of scenery from a moving car because the images often turn out blurred. I prefer to look and remember the view, although I might take a quick picture if there is a particularly striking scene, like a dramatic sunset.

提案: 回答表达了个人偏好但语法和用词有明显问题，影响自然流畅。应避免口语填充词（如“I I don't know why”）和错误短语（“makes me hair raising”不正确）。建议用一句主题句表明偏好，再用一两句具体原因或例子说明，例如害怕宽阔的水域或不喜欢海浪声。使用更合适的词汇如“feel uneasy”或“makes me feel scared”。

例: I prefer the mountains because I feel uneasy by the vastness of the sea. For example, I get nervous watching big waves and open water, so peaceful forests and high viewpoints are more relaxing for me.

× Yes, I do look out of the window at the scenery when I was traveling by bus or car because I'm trying to avoid the boredom during the trip.

✓ Yes, I do look out of the window at the scenery when I travel by bus or car because I'm trying to avoid boredom during the trip.

错误类型：过去时使用不当（Past tense issue）。原句中前半句用了一般现在时（"do look"）表达习惯性动作，但从句却用了过去时（"when I was traveling"），造成时态不一致。建议将从句改为一般现在时的"when I travel"以表示经常性的行为；此外可将"the boredom"简化为不可数名词"boredom"。

× No, I don't really take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I prefer to enjoy the scenery with my eyes. This can help me completely take in the stunning scenery.

✓ No, I don't really take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I prefer to enjoy it with my eyes. This helps me fully take in the stunning view.

错误类型：现在时/搭配问题（Present tense issue）。原句第二句使用"can help me completely take in"在语义上虽可理解，但时态和搭配更自然的说法是一般现在时的"helps me"与副词搭配"fully"。另外重复使用"scenery"冗余，改为"it"或改用"view"更地道。建议用简单的一般现在时和更自然的词序。

× To be honest, I prefer the mountains because when I stare at the sea, the sea usually gives me a sense of scary.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the mountains because when I stare at the sea, it usually makes me feel scared.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用不当（Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs）。短语"a sense of scary"是不地道的表达；正确说法应为动词短语"make sb feel + adjective"，即"makes me feel scared"或名词短语"a feeling of fear"。建议使用"feel scared"或"feel frightened"等自然表达。

× It makes me hair raising I I don't know why.

✓ It makes my hair stand on end; I don't know why.

错误类型：句子结构错误（Sentence structure errors）。原句结构混乱并出现重复"I I"，以及片语"hair raising"用法不当。更自然的表达是使用固定短语"make my hair stand on end"表示"使我毛骨悚然"，并用分号或句号分隔两部分。建议避免重复并使用正确的固定搭配。