Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 语法和表达需要更准确，避免重复与口语直译。回答要有明确主题句与连贯的支持细节，句子不超过五句。注意动词时态与代词使用，改用更自然的短语（例如 “I always look out of the window” 后跟原因或例子），并用连接词使句子流畅。

例: I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing different landscapes. For example, on my route home there are unique hills and rice fields that I find memorable. So whenever the view is beautiful, I pay attention and sometimes try to remember the scene.

提案: 注意时态和语法一致性（例如将过去/现在完成时用法正确），避免中式表达（“I want to memory”）。可以给出具体频率或例子，并用连接词衔接原因和结果，使回答更自然且不冗长。

例: Sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when I see something unusual. For instance, last month I photographed a field of bright yellow flowers I had never seen before. I take pictures so I can remember the moment and show it to my family.

提案: 注意动词时态和单词拼写（例如“grew up”，“surrounded”不要重复），并增加一两句支持细节来解释喜好，用连接词如“because”或“so”使结构更清晰。控制在五句内。

例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy the fresh breeze and the wide coastline. I grew up in a small town surrounded by mountains, so the sea feels more open and relaxing to me. When I visit the coast I like walking along the beach and listening to the waves.

× I always look out of the window at the scenery, especially when the view is very beautiful. I want I think the landscapes on my Rd. is so unique and precious that I have to remember them.

✓ I always look out of the window at the scenery, especially when the view is very beautiful. I think the landscapes on my road are so unique and precious that I have to remember them.

错误类型：动词的 -ing 形式/句子结构混乱（但主要问题在主谓一致与多余词）。解析：原句中“I want I think”是不必要且语法错误的重复，应删除“I want”，保留“I think”。此外，“Rd.”为缩写且使用不当，应写为“road”。最重要的是“landscapes ... is” 主语“landscapes”为复数，应使用复数动词“are”。建议：去掉多余的“I want”，把“Rd.”写全为“road”，并把“is”改为“are”。

× Sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the car window. When I saw some beautiful and unique views that I have never seen before, I can't help taking photos of them and I want to memory.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the car window. When I see some beautiful and unique views that I have never seen before, I can't help taking photos of them and I want to remember them.

错误类型：时态错误与动词搭配/词汇使用错误。解析：从上下文可见说话者描述的是习惯或在看到时的反应，应使用现在时“see”而不是过去时“saw”。另外，“I want to memory”是不正确的表达，正确应为“I want to remember them”或“I want to keep a memory of them”，因为“memory”是名词不能直接用作动词。建议：将“saw”改为现在时“see”，并把“want to memory”改为“want to remember them”。

× I prefer the sea. I grow up in the small town which is surrounded surrounded by mountains. I like the refresh breeze and the vast coastline by the sea.

✓ I prefer the sea. I grew up in a small town which is surrounded by mountains. I like the refreshing breeze and the vast coastline by the sea.

错误类型：现在时/过去时使用错误，形容词与重复词错误。解析：“I grow up”在描述过去经历时应使用过去时“I grew up”。句中“surrounded surrounded”重复，应删去一个。“refresh breeze”中“refresh”是动词或不正确的形容词，正确形容词为“refreshing”。另外“the small town”在首次提及时用不定冠词“a small town”更自然。建议：把“I grow up”改为“I grew up”，删掉重复的“surrounded”，将“refresh”改为“refreshing”，并把“the small town”改为“a small town”。