Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar issues, avoid slight redundancy, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, replace "when I am taking a bus" with "when I travel by bus or car" and correct "views of changing, building or beautiful landscape" to "changing buildings or beautiful landscapes."

例: Yes — I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching the changing buildings and green fields because they help me relax during long journeys.

提案: Improve grammar and word choice and make the reasoning clearer. Use linking words for contrast (e.g., "however") and correct phrases like "astonished views" to "astonishing views" or "particularly striking scenes." Keep it concise and specific about what kinds of scenes you photograph.

例: It depends. I only take photos when I see particularly striking scenes, such as dramatic mountain ranges or colourful sunsets; otherwise, I prefer to simply watch and enjoy the view.

提案: Fix tense and grammar errors and make the answer more fluent and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a reason using a linking word (e.g., "because"), and include a specific example of how the sea relaxes you. Replace "I get my diving lesson last year" with "I learned to dive last year."

例: I prefer the sea because I learned to scuba dive last year. For example, when I dive and explore the underwater world, I feel calm and less stressed because the quiet, slow-paced environment is very soothing.

× Yes, I always like to look out the window when I am taking a bus.

✓ Yes, I always like to look out the window when I am taking a bus.

No change needed: the present continuous 'am taking' is acceptable for ongoing action during travel and 'like to look' is idiomatic. However, a more natural option is 'when I take a bus.' To improve, use simple present for habitual actions: 'I always like to look out the window when I take a bus.'

× The views of changing, building or beautiful landscape help me enjoy my journey more.

✓ The changing views, buildings, or beautiful landscapes help me enjoy my journey more.

Adjectives must appear before nouns and parallel items in a list should match grammatically. 'Changing' modifies 'views' so order should be 'changing views'. Use plural nouns for general references: 'buildings' and 'landscapes.' Use commas to separate items.

× It depends. I only take photos when there are astonished views or landscape.

✓ It depends. I only take photos when there are astonishing views or a spectacular landscape.

'Astonished views' is incorrect because 'astonished' describes people, not views; the correct participle is 'astonishing.' Also 'landscape' should be qualified ('a spectacular landscape') or plural 'landscapes' for general reference. Match articles with singular nouns.

× If there is there are only ordinary landscape, I just watch and enjoy it.

✓ If there are only ordinary landscapes, I just watch and enjoy them.

The original has redundant 'is there are' and a subject-verb number mismatch. Use 'there are' for plural 'landscapes.' Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'landscapes.' Also keep conditional present simple: 'If there are... I just...'.

× I prefer the sea since I get my diving lesson last year.

✓ I prefer the sea since I took my diving lessons last year.

The time adverbial 'last year' requires past tense. Use simple past 'took.' Also 'diving lesson' should be plural 'lessons' if more than one; if one, use 'a diving lesson.' Use 'since' with past time can work informally but 'because' or 'since I took lessons last year' is acceptable.

× I really enjoy to scuba diving and when I dive when I go into the world under the sea I get more calm and release the stress.

✓ I really enjoy scuba diving, and when I dive and go into the world under the sea I feel calmer and release stress.

After 'enjoy' use the -ing form: 'enjoy scuba diving' not 'enjoy to scuba diving.' Remove redundant 'when' and link actions with 'and.' Use adjective 'calmer' (comparative) and the verb phrase 'release stress' (no article). Also use present simple for habitual actions: 'I feel calmer.'