Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word order errors (e.g., “when I’m sitting on the bus” not “when I sitting at the bus”). Use a linking word if adding a reason.

例: Yes. I usually look out the window when I’m sitting on a bus because I enjoy watching the passing scenery. For example, I like observing city streets and people because it helps me relax during the journey.

提案: Give a direct, grammatical response and support it with a brief reason. Correct verb forms and phrasing (e.g., “I don’t prefer to take photos” should be “I don’t prefer taking photos” or “I prefer not to take photos”). Avoid filler phrases like “you know?”

例: No, I prefer not to take photos from a moving car. Instead, I like to use my eyes to enjoy the view because photos taken from a moving vehicle often turn out blurry.

提案: Start with a clear preference sentence, then give specific reasons and one brief supporting example. Reduce repetition and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “sea view” or “the sea,” and describe colors succinctly). Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas.

例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I love the colours of the water, from deep blue to turquoise. Also, I enjoy swimming in the sea, which makes coastal trips more relaxing and fun.

× The answer is no doubt when when I sitting at the bus, I would look out from the window because I want to enjoy the views outside.

✓ No doubt, when I am sitting on the bus, I look out of the window because I want to enjoy the views outside.

Errors: missing auxiliary verb 'am' for present continuous ('I am sitting'), incorrect preposition 'at the bus' should be 'on the bus', repeated word 'when', unnecessary conditional 'would'—simple present fits habitual action. Suggestions: Remove duplicate words, use 'am sitting' for continuous, use 'on the bus' for vehicle, and 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window'.

× No, I'm not a person who prefer to take photo.

✓ No, I'm not a person who prefers to take photos.

Errors: subject-verb agreement with relative clause—'who' refers to 'person' (singular) so verb needs third person singular 'prefers'; 'photo' should be plural 'photos' after 'take' when speaking generally. Suggestions: Use 'prefers' and 'photos' for general habits.

× I am. I am a person who prefer just use my eyes to capture good views.

✓ I am. I am a person who prefers to just use my eyes to capture beautiful views.

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'prefer' should be 'prefers' because 'who' refers to 'person'; missing 'to' before 'just use'—infinitive needed; 'good views' is awkward—use 'beautiful views'. Suggestions: Ensure verb agrees with singular antecedent, include 'to' before verb, choose natural adjectives.

× It's not just my thing, you know?

✓ It's just not my thing, you know?

Error: word order—'just' usually precedes 'not' in this idiom or 'just not' is more natural. Suggestion: Use the natural collocation 'just not my thing' to express dislike.

× I love the Seaview much more than the mountain views because I like like the color of seas.

✓ I love the sea view much more than the mountain views because I like the colors of the sea.

Errors: repeated word 'like like' should be single 'like'; 'Seaview' should be 'sea view' (two words) or 'the sea view'; 'color of seas' incorrect number and article—use 'the colors of the sea' or 'the color of the sea'. Suggestions: Remove repeated words, use correct spacing and articles, and pluralize 'color(s)' appropriately.

× I I like the blue, dark blue or pink blue.

✓ I like blue, dark blue, or pinkish-blue.

Errors: duplicated 'I', inconsistent adjective forms—'pink blue' is not natural; use 'pinkish-blue' or 'pink-blue'. Suggestions: Remove duplicate pronoun and use standard color adjective forms with commas.

× I think it is very beautiful.

✓ I think it is very beautiful.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present opinion context; no change needed. Suggestion: None.

× Sometimes I I like swimming in the sea.

✓ Sometimes I like swimming in the sea.

Error: duplicated 'I'. Suggestions: Remove the extra 'I'.