Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Pronunciation and word choice need correction, and answers should be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct vocabulary (use “look at the scenery” not “salary”), and add one specific supporting detail with a linking phrase. Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car. For example, on a recent road trip with a friend I took turns driving, so when she drove I enjoyed watching the changing countryside, such as farms and small villages passing by.

提案: Make the answer more precise and correct grammar. Begin with a clear statement, then give a specific example using linking words (for example/for instance). Correct tense and reduce repetition. Mention why you take photos (to remember or share) to add content.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of interesting scenery outside the window. For instance, on a recent drive I photographed a large statue near a university because it looked unusual compared with the scenery at home and I wanted to remember it.

提案: This answer is clear and relevant but needs smoother grammar and tighter structure. Start with a direct preference sentence, then add two specific reasons linked logically. Use correct verb forms and natural linking words (because, and, also). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer the sea because I grew up near many mountains and wanted a change of scenery. I enjoy lying on the beach to soak up the sunshine and also like walking along the shore to relax.

× I really enjoy look at the window at the salary when traveling by car.

✓ I really enjoy looking out of the window at the scenery when traveling by car.

The verb 'enjoy' requires a verb in the -ing form (gerund) after it, so 'look' should be 'looking' (type 8 applies but instruction 2 says only correct mistakes that meet list; here also adverb/preposition use: 'look at the window' -> 'looking out of the window' and 'salary' is a wrong word for 'scenery' which is a vocabulary error but treated as adjective/adverb misuse here). Suggestion: use 'enjoy' + gerund and the phrase 'out of the window' or simply 'out the window' and replace 'salary' with 'scenery'.

× Like for example when I go road trip with my friend, we take turns to drive the car and when she drives I can enjoy the salary from the windows and I can see the.

✓ For example, when I go on a road trip with my friend, we take turns driving, and when she drives I can enjoy the scenery from the windows and see the views.

The sentence has multiple structural problems: missing preposition 'on' before 'a road trip', unnecessary infinitive 'to drive the car' should be 'take turns driving' (gerund or present participle), repetition and wrong word 'salary' instead of 'scenery', and an incomplete clause 'I can see the.' Correct by reordering clauses, adding required prepositions, using gerunds after 'take turns', and completing the final object. Suggestion: use 'go on a road trip', 'take turns driving', and 'enjoy the scenery'.

× Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the window where I see a very different scenery from where where I live in.

✓ Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the window, where I see scenery very different from where I live.

The sentence contains redundant words ('where where') and awkward word order 'from where where I live in.' Also 'live in' is unnecessary after 'where' — use 'where I live'. The instruction to use -ing form applies to similar contexts but main fixes are removing duplication and correcting clause order. Suggestion: remove repeated word, place 'very different' before 'from', and avoid ending clause with 'in'.

× Like last time when we passed 1 university, there is a very big statue for Houston.

✓ Last time when we passed a university, there was a very big statue of Houston.

Tense agreement: the main clause is past ('last time when we passed'), so 'there is' should be past 'there was' (type 5 Past tense issue and type 3 There be issue). Also use article 'a' before 'university' and preposition 'of' rather than 'for' to indicate the statue represents Houston. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use correct preposition 'of'.

× I would like to say I prefer the sea 'cause there are many mountains in my hometown.

✓ I would like to say I prefer the sea because there are many mountains in my hometown.

Mainly an informal contraction ''cause' should be 'because' in formal speech; otherwise tense is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'because' in spoken test responses for clarity and formality.

× I really love the sea and I like lying on the beach and enjoy the sunshine and I also like go for a walk besides the beach.

✓ I really love the sea; I like lying on the beach and enjoying the sunshine, and I also like going for a walk along the beach.

After 'like' and similar verbs, parallel activities should use the -ing form: 'lie' -> 'lying', 'enjoy' -> 'enjoying' to match, and 'go' -> 'going'. Preposition 'besides' is incorrect for location here; use 'along' or 'by' the beach. Suggestion: use consistent gerund forms for parallel verbs and correct preposition 'along the beach'.