Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
受験者
Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing place and have never seen before. The changing scenery makes the journey memorable and sometimes I take photo to keep those memory.
試験官
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
受験者
Yes, when I travel by car or bus, I usually bring a camera to capture interesting scenery like Mountain View or coastal sunset because I want to preserve those memory. I also enjoy sharing those photo with my Palin so we can remember the trip together.
試験官
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
受験者
The mountain is very beautiful, but I would like to say I prefer the sea because my hometown in Chiang Mai is really mountainous, so I see mountain every day. I rarely get to visit the coast, so the sea feels special and refreshing to me.
評価
総合
Part 1
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
スコア: 72.0提案: ตอบดีและชัดเจน แต่ควรปรับไวยากรณ์และความถูกต้องของคำ (เช่น ใช้ singular/plural, tense และ articles) ลดความซ้ำซ้อน และใช้ linking words เล็กน้อยเพื่อความราบรื่น ตัวอย่างเช่น ใช้ "because I enjoy seeing places I have never seen before" และ "sometimes I take photos to keep those memories." นอกจากนี้ควรจำกัดย่อหน้าไม่เกิน 3-4 ประโยคเพื่อความเป็นธรรมชาติ
例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing places I have never visited before. The changing scenery makes the journey memorable, so I sometimes take photos to keep those memories.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
スコア: 68.0提案: คำตอบมีเนื้อหาที่ดีแต่มีข้อผิดพลาดด้านคำศัพท์และการสะกด (เช่น "Mountain View" ควรใช้ lowercase ในกลางประโยค, "those memory" → "those memories", "photo" → "photos", และคำว่า "Palin" น่าจะผิดจาก "pal" หรือ "friend"). ควรใช้ linking word เช่น "for example" หรือ "and" เพื่อเชื่อมประโยค และจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 3 ประโยค
例: Yes. When I travel by car or bus, I usually bring a camera to capture interesting scenes, for example coastal sunsets or mountain views, because I want to preserve those memories. I also enjoy sharing the photos with my friends so we can remember the trip together.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
スコア: 80.0提案: ตอบตรงคำถามและให้เหตุผลชัดเจน มีความเป็นธรรมชาติ แต่ควรปรับบางส่วนของไวยากรณ์และความสอดคล้อง (เช่น "The mountains are very beautiful" และ "I see mountains every day") และสามารถเพิ่ม linking word เช่น "because" หรือ "so" ให้กระชับขึ้น ทำให้คำตอบสั้นและชัดเจนมากขึ้น
例: I prefer the sea because I grew up in Chiang Mai, which is full of mountains, so I see mountains every day. The coast feels special and refreshing to me since I rarely get to visit it.
文法
× Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing place and have never seen before.
✓ Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing places I have never seen before.
Use of gerund 'seeing' is correct but noun 'place' should be plural 'places' to match meaning; also clause order should be 'places I have never seen before' not 'have never seen before' after a period. Suggestion: make 'place' plural and attach the relative clause to 'places' to be grammatically correct.
× The changing scenery makes the journey memorable and sometimes I take photo to keep those memory.
✓ The changing scenery makes the journey memorable, and sometimes I take photos to keep those memories.
Count nouns 'photo' and 'memory' need plural forms 'photos' and 'memories' when referring to more than one; also add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. Use of present participle 'changing' is correct. Suggestion: pluralize the nouns and punctuate properly.
× Yes, when I travel by car or bus, I usually bring a camera to capture interesting scenery like Mountain View or coastal sunset because I want to preserve those memory.
✓ Yes, when I travel by car or bus, I usually bring a camera to capture interesting scenery like mountain views or coastal sunsets because I want to preserve those memories.
Proper nouns and count nouns: 'Mountain View' here seems to mean 'mountain views' so use lowercase and plural 'views'; 'coastal sunset' should be plural 'sunsets' if general; 'memory' should be plural 'memories'. Maintain parallel plural forms. Suggestion: pluralize and use lowercase for general nouns.
× I also enjoy sharing those photo with my Palin so we can remember the trip together.
✓ I also enjoy sharing those photos with my palin so we can remember the trip together.
'Photo' should be plural 'photos'. The word 'Palin' is likely a name or misspelling; if it refers to a friend 'pal', use 'pal' or 'pal-in' is unclear. If it is a name, capitalize properly. Suggestion: clarify intended noun; pluralize 'photos' and ensure correct capitalization of the person's name.
× The mountain is very beautiful, but I would like to say I prefer the sea because my hometown in Chiang Mai is really mountainous, so I see mountain every day.
✓ The mountains are very beautiful, but I would like to say I prefer the sea because my hometown in Chiang Mai is really mountainous, so I see mountains every day.
Use plural 'mountains' when speaking generally; subject-verb agreement requires plural 'are' for 'mountains'. Also 'see mountain every day' needs plural 'mountains'. Suggestion: use plural forms when referring to a range or general mountains and match verb accordingly.
× I rarely get to visit the coast, so the sea feels special and refreshing to me.
✓ I rarely get to visit the coast, so the sea feels special and refreshing to me.
Sentence is grammatically correct; article usage is appropriate ('the coast', 'the sea'). No change needed. Suggestion: none.
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