Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and noun usage (e.g., "allows" not "allowed", "locations" plural, avoid repetition like "experience when traveling").

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it allows me to see different landscapes and recognise towns. For example, I can spot landmarks or changes in architecture, which helps me know where I am and makes the journey more interesting.

提案: Give a complete, grammatically correct answer and add a brief reason with a linking phrase. Avoid leaving sentences unfinished and be specific about the safety concern. You can also mention an alternative if you want to add detail.

例: No, I don't take photos from a moving car because it is unsafe to handle a camera or phone while the vehicle is moving. Instead, I wait until we stop or I take photos from safer vantage points on foot.

提案: Answer directly with correct grammar and avoid repetition. Provide a specific reason and one supporting detail using linking words. Use correct verb agreement ("allows") and plural/singular forms properly.

例: I prefer the mountains because they allow me to enjoy wide, peaceful views and fresh air. For example, hiking on a trail gives me panoramic vistas of forests and valleys, which I find more relaxing than busy beaches.

× Yes, I look at the window while traveling because it's allowed me to see different views and location and make me identify a particular town and experience when traveling.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window while traveling because it allows me to see different views and locations and helps me identify particular towns and experiences.

Multiple errors: incorrect preposition ('look at the window' -> 'look out of the window') relates to viewing direction (ID 11). 'it's allowed me' uses incorrect tense and form; should be simple present 'it allows me' to match habitual action (ID 6). 'location' should be plural 'locations' to match 'different views' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). 'make me identify' requires a verb form and subject agreement: use 'helps me identify' (third person singular verb 'helps' with subject 'it', ID 2 and ID 27). Overall suggestion: use consistent present simple for habitual actions, correct prepositions, pluralize where appropriate, and use verbs that agree with singular subject 'it'.

× No, I don't take pictures outside the window of the car because it's not safe out there and.

✓ No, I don't take pictures out of the car window because it's not safe.

Problems: awkward prepositional phrase 'outside the window of the car' should be 'out of the car window' (preposition use, ID 11). The clause 'because it's not safe out there and.' is incomplete and contains an unnecessary conjunction 'and' (sentence structure error, ID 26). Also 'out there' is vague and redundant; simplify to 'because it's not safe.' Suggestion: remove the trailing 'and', use a clearer prepositional phrase, and make the clause complete.

× I prefer the mountain because it allow me view view large portraits of the environment.

✓ I prefer the mountains because they allow me to view large scenes of the landscape.

Errors: 'the mountain' vs intended general preference requires plural 'the mountains' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). 'it allow' is wrong because plural subject 'mountains' needs plural pronoun 'they' and verb must agree: 'they allow' (third person agreement, ID 2 and ID 27). 'view view' is a duplication/typo and should be 'view' or 'to view' (sentence structure/error, ID 26). 'large portraits of the environment' is awkward; 'large scenes of the landscape' is clearer (word choice/adjective use, ID 13). Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally, ensure subject-pronoun agreement, remove typos, and choose natural collocations like 'view large scenes' or 'see wide landscapes.'