Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более связно и кратко: начните с простого утверждения по теме, затем добавьте одно-два конкретных примера. Уберите лишние вставки (uh, umm) и повторы («so amazing»). Работайте над грамматикой (напр., «I love looking out the window when I travel») и порядком слов. Используйте связки: «because», «for example», «such as», чтобы обосновать мысль. Ограничьте ответ до 3–4 предложений.

例: Yes, I love looking out of the window when I travel. I enjoy it because I often see interesting places and beautiful nature, such as lakes and forests. For example, last month I saw several lakes on my way to the countryside, which made the journey very relaxing.

提案: Будьте точнее и логичнее: начните с прямого ответа, затем поясните причину кратко и ясно. Уберите лишние слова и исправьте порядок слов и времена (например, «I usually take taxis when I go into the city, and they don't stop»). Можно добавить альтернативу (например, taking photos from trains or on foot). Ограничьте до 2–3 предложений.

例: No, I usually don't take photos from a car. I often travel by taxi in the city and drivers rarely stop, so it's difficult to get good shots. Instead, I take photos when I walk around or travel by train.

提案: Сформулируйте один чёткий выбор и объясните причину с конкретикой, либо скажите, что любите оба и поясните, в чём различие. Избегайте повторов и исправьте слова (например, «I love nature very much», «Kazakhstan has many mountains»). Используйте связки «because», «for example» и не более 3–4 предложений.

例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the fresh air. For example, in Kazakhstan there are many beautiful mountain trails where I like to take photos and relax. However, I also enjoy the sea for its calm atmosphere on holidays.

× Yes, I'll, I love look out the window when I'm traveling, uh, when I'm that, where when I'm in the journey, because there are so amazing and interesting places that I've never seen before and they're so amazing and nature so, umm, rethinking and umm, there are so many lakes.

✓ Yes, I love looking out of the window when I'm traveling, especially on a journey, because there are so many amazing and interesting places that I've never seen before, and nature is so beautiful; there are also many lakes.

The main issues are incorrect verb form and preposition use. 'Love look' is incorrect: after verbs like 'love' we use the gerund 'looking' (verb + -ing). Use 'looking out of the window' (phrasal preposition) rather than 'look out the window'. 'When I'm in the journey' is unnatural; use 'on a journey' or 'when I'm traveling'. Several words are redundant or ungrammatical and were rewritten for clarity. Suggestion: after verbs of preference use gerund forms (enjoy/like/love + -ing); use 'on a journey' and 'looking out of the window'.

× To be honest, I don't take photos umm because I get in the taxi when I want to go in a city and the taxis and don't stop in these places, so unfortunately I can't take photos.

✓ To be honest, I don't take photos because I usually get a taxi when I go to the city and taxis don't stop at these places, so unfortunately I can't take photos.

Problems: incorrect verb forms and article use affecting modal sense. 'I get in the taxi when I want to go in a city' should be 'I usually get a taxi when I go to the city.' 'the taxis and don't stop' is ungrammatical; use 'taxis don't stop at these places.' The modal 'can't' is fine but context required present habitual phrasing. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and correct prepositions ('go to the city', 'stop at').

× I prefer bots in mountains and sea I love I very much.

✓ I prefer both mountains and the sea; I love them very much.

Errors: 'bots' is a misspelling of 'both' and quantifier/coordinate structure was wrong. 'In mountains and sea' requires articles and correct prepositions: use 'both mountains and the sea.' Pronoun reference missing: use 'them' to refer back to mountains and sea. Suggestion: use 'both' to link two items and include 'the' for 'sea' when speaking generally about a specific kind of place; use appropriate pronouns to avoid fragments.

× I very love the natures Umm, I love mountains Umm in our Kazakhstan there's so many mountains and I love taking them and in the sea I I loved. It's so amazing.

✓ I love nature very much. I love mountains. In Kazakhstan there are many mountains and I enjoy visiting them, and I also love the sea; it's amazing.

Multiple problems: word order and adjective/adverb misuse ('I very love' incorrect — 'very' cannot modify 'love' like that; use 'love very much' or 'really love'). 'the natures' is incorrect plural/article use; 'nature' is uncountable, so use 'nature' without 'the' here. 'There's so many mountains' should be 'there are many mountains' (subject-verb agreement and quantifier). 'I love taking them' is unclear; 'visiting them' is appropriate. Tense 'I I loved' should be present 'I love'. Suggestion: place adverbs properly (love very much / really love), use 'nature' as uncountable, ensure subject-verb agreement ('there are many'), and choose clear verbs like 'visit' for places.