Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更简洁且语法正确。开头用一句明确的主题句，然后用1–2个具体细节支撑，避免重复和多余的连词。注意动词形式（looking → look），冠词和从句结构（e.g. what they are doing）。可以用简单的连接词（for example, and, because）使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching street scenes and observing other passengers because it helps me notice different outfits and activities. For example, I often spot street vendors or people reading, which I find interesting.

提案: 回答应更自然并减少重复。先给出简短肯定句，然后说明原因并提供具体例子。避免直译词组（e.g. "material" 不自然），用更合适的词如 "content" 或 "posts"。注意时态和语序，使句子紧凑。

例: Yes, I often take photos outside the window because I like to collect visual content during trips. I usually edit them and post on my social media with captions to share my feelings or memories.

提案: 回答要更流畅并用简洁的结构给出两个具体理由。避免口头语（uh）和不完整的引用。引用研究时简要说明结论并用正确表达（e.g. "a study from National Taiwan University found that..."）。注意名词复数和用词（greenery 或 green spaces）。

例: I prefer the mountains because I live near one and enjoy the peaceful atmosphere. Also, a study from National Taiwan University found that spending time around green spaces is beneficial for eyesight and overall health, which makes mountains more appealing to me.

× Yes, I like to look at the window when I'm traveling by bus and car because the reason is that I like to looking for the street scene and like to look for the passengers, what they are doing and like to see the people how is their outfit and the.

✓ Yes, I like to look out of the window when I'm traveling by bus or car because I like looking for street scenes and watching passengers — what they are doing and how they are dressed.

错误类型：动词后加 -ing 形式使用不当（Grammar Problem Type ID 8）。原因：原句中使用了不正确的动名词形式“to looking”以及多处重复和不自然的结构。应使用不带 to 的动名词（like + doing），并把 'look at the window' 改为更自然的 'look out of the window'；将并列结构规范为 'looking for street scenes and watching passengers'，并用 'how they are dressed' 表达他人穿着。建议：记住动词 like 后接动名词或不定式兩者皆可但常用 like + -ing 表达兴趣；避免重复冗余，保持并列结构一致性。

× Yes, I am person who like to take photos of the scenery outside the windows because I like to take pictures and this is a like a material. So let me just send to my own social website and I can edit some words on the pictures and share my emotions to my friends.

✓ Yes, I am a person who likes to take photos of the scenery outside the window because I enjoy taking pictures. I can upload them to my social media, add captions, and share my feelings with my friends.

错误类型：代词和冠词使用不当（主问题归类为代词/限定词错误，Grammar Problem Type ID 12）。原因：原句缺少不定冠词 'a'（I am person → I am a person）；动词与主语不一致（who like → who likes）；'this is a like a material' 结构不明确且用词不当；'send to my own social website' 用法不自然，应为 'upload to my social media'。建议：注意在可数名词前加冠词，关系从句中主谓一致，使用常见搭配如 'upload to social media' 和 'add captions'，并用 'share my feelings' 更自然表达情感分享。

× I prefer the mountain scene and the reason is that I'm living beside a mountain.

✓ I prefer mountain scenery, and the reason is that I live beside a mountain.

错误类型：现在时使用不当（Grammar Problem Type ID 6）。原因：'I'm living beside a mountain' 在此属于一般事实或常态，应使用一般现在时 'I live' 而非进行时 'I'm living'（进行时表示正在进行的临时动作）。此外 'the mountain scene' 更自然表达为 'mountain scenery'。建议：描述长期状态或习惯使用一般现在时，短语选择用常见搭配 'mountain scenery'。

× And the second reason is that I'm reading a research according to the National Taiwan University and they sure, uh, research is that if you look more greeneries and this is good for your eyes and your health.

✓ The second reason is that I read a study from National Taiwan University which says that seeing more greenery is good for your eyes and your health.

错误类型：连词/句子结构错误（Grammar Problem Type ID 16）。原因：原句中 'I'm reading a research' 时态和词汇选择不当，应为 'I read a study' 或 'a study says'; 'according to the National Taiwan University and they sure, uh, research is that' 结构混乱且有口语填充词，应删去；'look more greeneries' 词序和用法错误，应为 'seeing more greenery'。建议：用 'a study from ... says that' 引用研究，使用名词 'greenery' 或 'green spaces'，并保持句子连贯流畅，避免口头填充词。