Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap net fakat tekrarlamalar ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Konuya doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından 1–2 destekleyici cümle ekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın, doğru prepozisyon ve artikelleri kullanın (e.g. “look out of the window”, “because I am alone”), ve cümleleri bağlamak için kısa bağlaçlar kullanın (e.g. “because”, “so”, “and”). Ayrıca maksimum 4–5 kısa cümlede kalın.

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or train because I enjoy watching the passing scenery. I find it relaxing and it helps me notice small details like old houses or fields. Sometimes I take mental notes of places I’d like to visit later.

提案: Cevapta yine gereksiz tekrarlar ve eksik dilbilgisi var. Cevabı doğrudan verip nedenlerini açık ve özgün örneklerle destekleyin. Tekrarlayan ifadeleri kaldırın ve zaman uyumuna dikkat edin (örn. “I like to take photos” veya “I often take photos”). Paylaşma amacını belirtirken kiminle paylaştığınızı ekleyin.

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car because I love nature photography. I usually capture landscapes like forests or rivers and later share the best shots with my friends on social media. This way I can keep memories of interesting places.

提案: Cevap kısa, dilbilgisi hataları ve anlam belirsizliği var. Önce tercihinizi net söyleyin (mountains or the sea), sonra kısa bir sebep verin. Kişisel duygu ve bir örnek ekleyin. Özneler ve zamirler doğru kullanılmalı (örn. “the sea relaxes me”), ve maksimum 2–3 cümleyle kalın.

例: I prefer the sea because its sound and breeze relax me. For example, I enjoy sitting on the shore and watching the waves while taking photos, which helps me feel calmer.

× Yes, I usually look at the window when traveling by bus or train because I like to look at the window because I have no share so I have to look at the window to scenery.

✓ Yes, I usually look out of the window when traveling by bus or train because I like the view and I have no one to share it with, so I look at the scenery.

The original sentence has several issues relevant to the -ing form and sentence structure: 'look at the window when traveling' is acceptable but 'look out of the window' is more natural for viewing scenery; 'to scenery' is incorrect because 'scenery' is a noun and needs a preposition ('at the scenery' or simply 'the scenery'); 'I have no share' is incorrect wording and likely meant 'I have no one to share it with'. Suggestions: use 'look out of the window' or 'look at the scenery', replace 'I have no share' with 'I have no one to share it with', and simplify redundant phrases. Ensure verb forms like 'traveling' as gerund are used correctly and prepositions are added where needed.

× Yes, I'd like to take a picture of the scenery because I will take pictures of the scenery and then I want to share the pictures of the scenery and I usually like nature scenery and I want to share with.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of the scenery because I want to share them, and I usually enjoy natural landscapes.

Problems include incorrect or redundant use of verb forms and missing objects/pronouns: 'I'd like to take a picture' is fine, but the sentence repeats the same idea unnecessarily; 'I will take pictures' mixes future unnecessarily with present preferences; 'I want to share with' is incomplete because it lacks an object ('share them' or 'share them with others'). Suggestions: use consistent tense (present simple for habitual actions), avoid repetition, and include pronouns to complete verbs that need objects.

× I usually prefer take picture of see because she's cool relaxing me.

✓ I usually prefer taking pictures of the sea because it is calming and relaxing.

Multiple errors: 'prefer take' is incorrect — after 'prefer' you need a gerund ('prefer taking') or an infinitive with 'to' ('prefer to take'); 'picture of see' mis-spells 'sea' and needs plural 'pictures' to match 'usually'; 'she's' refers to a person, but inanimate nouns like 'sea' take 'it'. Also word order and adjective use: 'cool relaxing me' should be 'calming' or 'relaxing' and placed after the noun. Suggestions: use 'prefer taking pictures of the sea', correct spelling of 'sea', use 'it' for pronoun, and choose appropriate adjective 'calming' or 'relaxing'.