Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector. Avoid repetition ("look out" and "look at" used close together).

例: Yes, I do. Although I have lived in this city all my life, I still enjoy looking out of the window when I travel, because I often spot small changes in the streets and parks that I would otherwise miss.

提案: Use a clearer, more natural phrase and correct informal language. Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Replace "kinda" with "quite" or "rather" and avoid awkward phrasing like "more no than yes."

例: Not usually. It's quite difficult to get a sharp photo from a moving car, so I only take pictures occasionally when the traffic is stopped or the view is unusually striking.

提案: Correct small fluency issues and tighten the response. Start with the preference, then give two specific reasons linked with a connector. Remove filler words and repeated subjects.

例: I definitely prefer the sea because I love relaxing on the beach and swimming in warm water, and the coastal atmosphere helps me unwind after a busy week.

× To be honest, yes, even though I've been living in my city for all my life, I like to look out of the windows while I'm on my way somewhere to look at the scenery and every time I notice something different.

✓ To be honest, yes. Even though I've lived in this city my whole life, I like to look out of the window while I'm on my way somewhere to look at the scenery, and I notice something different every time.

Problems: misuse of 'I've been living in my city for all my life' (awkward continuous with 'all my life') and plural/definite article issues with 'the windows'; run-on sentence and word order. Correction uses present perfect simple 'I've lived' to express a life-long state, 'this city' and 'the window' as the usual collocation when referring to looking out from a vehicle, and reorders 'every time I notice something different' to 'I notice something different every time' for natural adverb placement. Also split into clearer sentences. Grammar problem type ID:10

× More no than yes, because while I'm going somewhere by car, it's kinda difficult to catch the scenery in a stable position.

✓ More no than yes, because when I'm traveling by car it's kind of difficult to capture the scenery steadily.

Problems: unnatural phrase 'more no than yes' is colloquial but acceptable; 'while I'm going somewhere by car' is wordy—'when I'm traveling by car' is natural. 'kinda' should be 'kind of' in formal speech, 'catch the scenery in a stable position' is awkward: use 'capture the scenery steadily'. Also remove unnecessary comma. This fixes adverb placement and word choice for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:20

× I definitely prefer sea because when I travel I I'm a huge lover of just lying on the beach, enjoying the sun and swimming in the warm water.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea because when I travel, I'm a huge fan of just lying on the beach, enjoying the sun, and swimming in warm water.

Problems: missing article before 'sea' — should be 'the sea' when speaking generally about the sea as a preference. Also there is a typo 'I I'm' which repeats the pronoun. 'Huge lover of' is awkward in English; 'huge fan of' or 'love' is more natural. Added commas to separate clauses and list items. This addresses third person/subject issues and article usage. Grammar problem type ID:2

× More no than yes, because while I'm going somewhere by car, it's kinda difficult to catch the scenery in a stable position.

✓ More no than yes, because when I'm traveling by car it's kind of difficult to capture the scenery steadily.

Problem: 'the scenery' is correct, but 'a stable position' is awkward; if intended, use 'a stable frame' or avoid article by using adverb 'steadily'. Rewriting removes the unnecessary article and improves meaning. Fixing article/phrase usage improves clarity. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I like to look out of the windows while I'm on my way somewhere to look at the scenery and every time I notice something different.

✓ I like to look out of the window while I'm on my way somewhere to look at the scenery, and I notice something different every time.

Problem: 'the windows' suggests multiple windows; when referring to looking out from a vehicle, English speakers usually say 'look out of the window' (singular) as a general habit. Changing to singular makes the sentence more natural. Also adjusted adverb placement for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:1