Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 发音和语法需改进；回答应更直接并使用连贯句子，避免多余或不正确的词。可以先用主题句直接回答，然后用1-2个具体细节支持。注意冠词、介词和词序，如 say “Yes, I do” 然后补充地点和原因，用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I do. When I travel by bus or car I often look out at the city scenery because I enjoy its mix of modern buildings and green spaces. For example, I like watching people in parks and the skyline as we drive past, which makes the journey more interesting.

提案: 句子需更准确、简洁并使用复数或冠词正确表达。尽量用连词和分类来组织细节，例如先说明频率或原因，再列举具体景物，避免重复词汇。

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I want to remember interesting places. For instance, I usually photograph rivers, parks, historic buildings and sandy riverbanks when the view looks particularly nice.

提案: 表达要更自然并用完整句子说明原因，可加一两点具体细节或比较。注意形容词顺序和语法（e.g., “the sea is large and blue”）。避免重复和碎片句。

例: I prefer the sea because I love its vastness and the clear blue water. Compared with the mountains, the beach feels more relaxing to me and I enjoy swimming and watching the horizon.

× Yes, I do one actually via bus or car.

✓ Yes, I do. Actually, I travel by bus or car.

原句结构混乱，“one actually via bus or car”不是正确的说法。应把肯定回答“Yes, I do.”独立，然后用完整句子说明交通方式：travel by bus or car。建议把句子分成两部分，保持清晰。

× I look out the window at the sanctuary.

✓ I look out the window at the scenery.

考生想表达看风景，但用词“sanctuary”不合上下文且含义偏向“保护区/圣地”。应使用“scenery”或“the scenery”表示沿途风景。中文建议：使用正确名词表达“风景”。

× I think the city is very beautiful and international allocate.

✓ I think the city is very beautiful and international.

原句中“international allocate”不合语法，也无意义。应去掉“allocate”。若想表达“国际化”，直接用“international”。建议简化为“I think the city is very beautiful and international.” 中文说明：删除或替换无意义词，使用正确形容词。

× Yes I do. I take photo of the scenery outside the crowd window.

✓ Yes, I do. I take photos of the scenery outside the car window.

“photo”在此处应使用复数或可数形式“photos”；“crowd window”是错误搭配，应为“car window”。中文建议：名词复数和常用搭配要注意（photos, car window）。

× The outside have many beautiful, beautiful things.

✓ Outside, there are many beautiful things.

主语与动词不一致。原句“The outside have”中“outside”作为地点副词不作主语，应用“There are”引出存在句，动词用复数形式“are”。中文建议：用“There is/There are”表达“有……”。

× The sand, the river, the building, the park.

✓ There are the sand, the river, the buildings and the park.

列举时若要用存在句，应完整表达并注意名词单复数一致。原句只是片段式列举，建议用完整句并把“building”改为复数“buildings”或保持一致。中文建议：列举要用完整句，名词单复数要一致。

× I prefer the sea.

✓ I prefer the sea.

该句本身语法正确，无需修改。保持原句。中文说明：句子正确，表达偏好时可用“I prefer the sea.”

× I like the sea how large and the color it blue it very clean and beautiful.

✓ I like the sea because it is vast and its color is blue. It is very clean and beautiful.

原句中词序、连词和代词使用混乱：应使用因为结构“because”，形容词搭配用“vast”表示“广阔”，并用完整句子描述颜色和状态，代词用“it”并接系动词“is”。中文建议：用完整从句连接原因，注意主语、系动词和形容词的正确顺序。