Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
受験者
Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car. When I go to other places, I enjoy watching the local scenery, for example mountains, rivers or quiet villages because it helps me relax and understand the place I am visiting.
試験官
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
受験者
Yes, I really like take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it's a habit most of us and I'm no exception. In addition, I can take photos of beautiful and peaceful things which I never seen.
試験官
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
受験者
The mountains and sea also have old beauty, but perhaps I like the mountains because I like longing. It's boring and seeing mountains and forests, it's very interesting and it's also the home of.
評価
総合
Part 1
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
スコア: 78.0提案: Câu trả lời tốt nhưng cần rõ ràng hơn về cấu trúc và rút gọn để tự nhiên hơn. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, rồi dùng một hoặc hai câu bổ sung cụ thể hơn (ví dụ kể một lần đi du lịch gần đây và mô tả một cảnh tượng cụ thể). Tránh câu quá dài và ngắt đoạn hợp lý; sử dụng liên từ như “for example” hoặc “such as” một cách chính xác.
例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, on a recent trip to the countryside I watched green rice paddies and a winding river, which made me feel relaxed and gave me a better sense of the local way of life.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
スコア: 67.0提案: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ chính xác trong cách diễn đạt. Tránh lỗi như thiếu động từ chia đúng ("like to take" not "like take") và thì sai ("I have never seen" not "I never seen"). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về điều bạn chụp (ví dụ: sunrises, old houses) và lý do (kỷ niệm, chia sẻ lên mạng xã hội) sẽ làm nội dung hấp dẫn hơn.
例: Yes, I like to take photos from the car window because I often see interesting scenes like old stone bridges or early morning mist. I usually take these pictures to remember the trip and to share them with my friends.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
スコア: 50.0提案: Câu trả lời hiện tại khó hiểu và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp ("old beauty", "I like longing", câu không hoàn chỉnh). Nên mở đầu rõ ràng (I prefer the mountains) rồi nêu 2-3 lý do cụ thể và mạch lạc (ví dụ: fresh air, hiking, peace). Hạn chế dùng những câu mơ hồ; kết thúc bằng một câu hoàn chỉnh để ý tưởng rõ ràng.
例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh air and quiet surroundings. For instance, hiking in the hills helps me relax after a busy week and I like seeing forests and small mountain villages.
文法
× Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car.
✓ Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car.
The phrase 'look out the window' is acceptable in some dialects, but the more standard and precise prepositional phrase is 'look out of the window' to indicate direction from inside to outside. Suggestion: Use 'look out of the window' or simply 'look out' depending on context.
× When I go to other places, I enjoy watching the local scenery, for example mountains, rivers or quiet villages because it helps me relax and understand the place I am visiting.
✓ When I go to other places, I enjoy watching the local scenery, for example, mountains, rivers, or quiet villages, because it helps me relax and understand the place I am visiting.
Missing commas and list punctuation, not a core grammar form error but clarity. Use commas to separate items in a list and before 'because' to improve readability. Suggestion: Use commas after 'for example' and between list items.
× Yes, I really like take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it's a habit most of us and I'm no exception.
✓ Yes, I really like taking photos of the scenery outside the car window because it's a habit for most of us and I'm no exception.
After 'like' we must use the gerund form 'taking' rather than the base verb 'take'. Also 'a habit most of us' is missing 'for' to indicate 'for most of us'. Suggestion: Use 'like taking' and 'a habit for most of us' or 'a habit among most of us'.
× In addition, I can take photos of beautiful and peaceful things which I never seen.
✓ In addition, I can take photos of beautiful and peaceful things which I have never seen.
The clause refers to an experience up to the present, so the present perfect 'have never seen' is required rather than the simple past 'never seen'. Suggestion: Use present perfect 'have never seen' for experiences up to now.
× The mountains and sea also have old beauty, but perhaps I like the mountains because I like longing.
✓ Both the mountains and the sea have a timeless beauty, but I prefer the mountains because I enjoy solitude and longing.
Original is unclear: 'old beauty' is unnatural, and 'I like longing' is ungrammatical. 'Prefer' suits comparison and 'enjoy solitude and longing' clarifies the meaning. Suggestion: Use 'prefer' for expressing choice and replace 'old beauty' with 'timeless beauty' or 'ancient beauty' depending on meaning.
× It's boring and seeing mountains and forests, it's very interesting and it's also the home of.
✓ I find the city boring, while seeing mountains and forests is very interesting; they also feel like home to me.
Original is fragmented and contains incomplete clause 'it's also the home of.' Clarify contrast with proper subjects and complete the idea 'home to me'. Suggestion: Use complete sentences with clear subjects and objects, e.g. 'They also feel like home to me.'
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