Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid hesitation ("uh"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, mention a particular thing you like to see or how it makes you feel. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel. For example, I especially like watching changing landscapes, such as forests and small villages, because they help me relax and notice local life.

提案: Avoid filler words and combine ideas into one clear sentence with a linking phrase. Add a brief reason or one specific example to make the answer richer and more natural.

例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery, especially mountains, because their shapes and colours look dramatic in different lights. For instance, I like capturing sunrise on mountain ridges when travelling through highland areas.

提案: Answer directly and give a specific reason with a linking word; avoid vague or negative phrasing about the alternative. Provide one supporting detail about what you enjoy about mountains to make the response more specific and natural.

例: I prefer the mountains because they offer impressive views and peaceful hiking trails. For example, I enjoy walking along forest paths and stopping at viewpoints to admire the valleys below.

× Yes, I love to look out of the window when travelling and, uh, get to experience new views and, uh, nature.

✓ Yes, I love to look out of the window when travelling and get to experience new views and nature.

The sentence repeats filler 'uh' which is spoken hesitation but not a grammatical error; however the structure 'travelling and, uh, get to experience' is coordinated verbs after 'love to' so both verbs should be in base form with 'to' only before the first verb: 'love to look ... and get ...' Removing extra commas improves flow. Suggestion: omit filler words in formal responses and keep parallel verb forms.

× Yes, I love to take pictures of the, uh, beautiful scenes. I especially love to take, uh, pictures of mountains.

✓ Yes, I love to take pictures of the beautiful scenery. I especially love to take pictures of mountains.

'Scenes' is not wrong but 'scenery' is uncountable and more natural here; fillers 'uh' should be removed. Keep the infinitive structure 'love to take' consistent. Suggestion: use 'scenery' for collective views and avoid filler words in prepared answers.

× I would say that I prefer mountains because of the views and uh, beaches are rather sandy and salty.

✓ I would say that I prefer the mountains because of the views; beaches, on the other hand, are rather sandy and salty.

This sentence needs clearer contrast. Adding the definite article 'the' before 'mountains' is natural when speaking about mountains in general as a category; punctuation and a transition phrase improve clarity. The original had informal filler 'uh' and a run-on structure. Suggestion: use a connector for contrast (e.g., 'on the other hand') and include 'the' when referring to a general class like 'the mountains.'