Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal ve anlaşılır ancak birkaç dilbilgisi hatası ve tekrarlar var. Cümleleri daha akıcı hale getirmek için ufak düzeltmeler yapın (ör. 'watch landscape' yerine 'look at the scenery', 'take break' yerine 'take a break'). Ayrıca bağlantı ifadeleriyle düşünceleri daha net bağlayın ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın. Önerilen düzeltmeler: basit present tense kullanımı, iki kısa cümleyi birleştirme ve bağlaç kullanma.

例: I often look at the scenery through the window, especially when I'm travelling to a new place, because it relaxes me and makes the journey feel shorter. It is also a good way to take a break from my phone.

提案: Cevapta dolaylı tekrarlar, dolgu kelimeleri (uh, umm) ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Daha kısa, net cümleler kurun; gereksiz dolguları kaldırın. Fiil uyumuna dikkat edin (ör. 'I always take' değil 'I always taking'). Ek olarak nedenleri açık ve spesifik örnekle destekleyin (ör. daha iyi ışık, temiz görüş).

例: Yes, I usually take photos from outside the car window because the view is clearer and there's less glare. I take these photos to remember special moments, such as interesting landscapes or unusual weather.

提案: Cevap içinde kelime sırası ve dilbilgisi hataları mevcut ('prefer take a trip to see' gibi). Dolgu sözcüklerini kaldırın ve net bir konu cümlesi kurun. Geçmiş deneyime bağlanan sebebi daha açık ve spesifik detaylarla genişletin (ör. 'I enjoy swimming, seafood, and watching sunsets'). Bağlaçlarla cümleleri doğal bağlayın.

例: I prefer the sea because I grew up near the coast, so I have many fond memories of beach trips. I especially enjoy swimming, eating fresh seafood, and watching the sunset by the water.

× I often watch landscape through the window, especially if I'm traveling somewhere new, and it helps relax and pass the time quickly.

✓ I often watch the landscape through the window, especially if I'm traveling somewhere new, and it helps me relax and pass the time quickly.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'landscape' because we refer to a specific view visible through the window. Also 'helps relax' requires a subject or object (helps me relax). Suggestion: add 'the' and include 'me' after 'helps' to make the sentence grammatically complete. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× Also, it's a good way to take break from my phone.

✓ Also, it's a good way to take a break from my phone.

The noun 'break' requires the indefinite article 'a' in this context ('take a break'). Without the article the phrase is ungrammatical. Suggestion: insert 'a' before 'break'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× I usually prefer taking photos outside of the window because it helps me uh, take pictures clearer than inside uh, in the car and also it helps me remember uh, the moment that I had experienced.

✓ I usually prefer taking photos through the window because it helps me take clearer pictures than inside the car, and it also helps me remember the moments I experienced.

Use 'through the window' rather than 'outside of the window' to describe photographing from inside a vehicle. 'Take pictures clearer' needs reordering to 'take clearer pictures' (adjective before noun). 'Inside uh, in the car' is redundant; use 'inside the car'. 'The moment that I had experienced' should be 'the moments I experienced' (simple past is more natural and avoids unnecessary past perfect). Suggestions: replace preposition, move adjective, remove redundancy, and simplify tense. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× That's why I always umm, taking uh, landscape photos.

✓ That's why I always take landscape photos.

The verb form 'taking' is a present participle and does not fit after 'always' without an auxiliary; the correct simple present form is 'take' to express habitual action. Suggestion: use 'take' for repeated actions. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× I usually prefer take a trip to see because when I was a kid my family always stayed umm, the places nearby the sea.

✓ I usually prefer to take trips to see the sea because when I was a kid my family always stayed in places near the sea.

After 'prefer' the infinitive 'to take' or gerund 'taking' should be used; here 'to take' is appropriate. 'A trip' vs plural depends on general preference; 'trips' fits better. 'Stayed the places nearby the sea' is incorrect: use 'stayed in places near the sea' (preposition 'in' and adjective order). Suggestions: use 'to take', pluralize if general, and correct prepositions and word order. Grammar Problem Type ID: 8

× That's why umm, if I uh, would like to travel somewhere which is new, I choose uh, seaside because I always enjoy swimming and umm, spending time by sea.

✓ That's why, if I would like to travel somewhere new, I choose the seaside because I always enjoy swimming and spending time by the sea.

Use 'somewhere new' without 'which is' for conciseness. 'Choose seaside' needs the definite article 'the seaside'. Use 'by the sea' rather than 'by sea'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary relative clause, add 'the' before 'seaside' and 'sea', and simplify phrasing. Grammar Problem Type ID: 16