Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子总体能回答问题，但有重复与语法错误（如“most mostly”），句子结构可以更清晰。建议：1) 直接给出主题句，然后用一到两个简短细节支持；2) 注意避免重复词并修正小语法错误；3) 使用连接词使表达更流畅（例如 because, so, and）。

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when my parents drive. I enjoy watching the passing mountains and rivers because they make the journey relaxing.

提案: 回答明确但有语法和用词问题（如“can not be clearly on my phone screens”，“I just enjoying”）。建议：1) 用正确的时态和形式（cannot / can't, be clear, enjoy）；2) 简洁表达原因并给出偏好；3) 用连接词如 so 或 because 保持连贯。

例: No, I usually don't take photos because the car moves too fast and the pictures turn out blurry. Instead, I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes.

提案: 回答不清晰且有多处语法与逻辑问题（如开头疑问句式错误、句子未完成）。建议：1) 直接给出偏好并解释原因；2) 使用完整句子并给出具体细节或感受；3) 使用连接词（because, so）并避免未完成的句子。

例: I prefer the mountains because I can't swim and I'm a bit afraid of the sea. Also, mountains make me feel peaceful and refreshed, so I always enjoy visiting them.

× Yes, most mostly when my parents drive the car I will look out the window at the scenery like mountains or rivers outside.

✓ Yes, mostly when my parents drive the car I look out of the window at the scenery, such as mountains or rivers.

该句存在时态和表达冗余问题。原句用“I will look”表示将来，但根据问题（习惯性动作），应使用一般现在时“I look”。此外“most mostly”重复，应保留一个“mostly”；动词搭配是“look out of the window”或“look out the window”，使用“such as”比“like”更书面且清晰。改进建议：描述习惯性动作时用一般现在时，避免词语重复。

× No, the car drives fast and the picture can not be clearly on my phone screens. So mostly I just enjoying the scenery and I won't take pictures.

✓ No, the car drives fast and pictures cannot be clear on my phone. So mostly I just enjoy the scenery and I don't take pictures.

句中有多个问题： 1) “can not be clearly on my phone screens”结构不正确，正确用法是“cannot be clear”来描述图像清晰度；“phone screens”复数冗余，通常用“my phone”。 2) “I just enjoying”是动词形式错误，应为一般现在时“I just enjoy”，因为说的是通常情况。 3) “I won't take pictures”表达将来否定，与上下文不符，应为一般现在时“I don't take pictures”。改进建议：叙述习惯性或常态行为用一般现在时，动词后别用-ing形式代替原形或正确时态，注意形容词/副词位置（clear作表语）。

× Will I pay for the mountains because I can't swim? I'm a little afraid of sea and the and I think the mountain has a magic power so every time I see the mountain I can.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I can't swim. I'm a little afraid of the sea, and I think the mountains have a magical power, so every time I see them I feel calm.

原句存在多处错误： 1) “Will I pay for the mountains”用错了情态/疑问结构，应直接陈述偏好“I prefer the mountains”。 2) 缺少定冠词“the sea”。 3) “the and I think”有重复和连接错误，应使用连词“and”。 4) “the mountain has a magic power”语法上可，但更自然用复数“mountains have a magical power”。 5) 句尾“so every time I see the mountain I can.” 不完整，缺少谓语，需补全为“I feel calm”或类似表达。改进建议：回答偏好时使用简单陈述句，注意冠词和完整句子结构，避免使用不完整的助动词句末。