Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap net değil ve dil bilgisi hataları çok. Soruyu doğrudan cevaplamak için açık bir konu cümlesi kullanın, ardından nedenini basit ve tutarlı bir şekilde açıklayın. Bağlaçlar (because, so, therefore) ve zaman ifadeleri düzgün kullanılmalı. Ayrıca gereksiz veya anlamsız kelime ve cümleleri çıkarın ve 1-3 kısa cümleyle sınırlayın.

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. It helps me relax and sometimes I notice small details, like interesting buildings or people, that I would miss otherwise.

提案: Cümle yapısı karışık ve kelime seçimi hatalı. Net bir "evet" ya da "hayır" ile başlayın ve ardından kısa bir sebep verin. "Photo" ve "video" farkını belirtin, duyguyu açıkça ifade etmek için doğru sıfatları kullanın (nostalgic, peaceful). Cümleleri 1-3 kısa ve akıcı cümleye indirin.

例: I usually don't take photos; I prefer recording short videos from the car window because moving images feel more nostalgic and peaceful to me. Videos capture the atmosphere better than still pictures.

提案: Cevap belirsiz ve anlamsız zamir kullanımı var. Tercihinizi açıkça belirtin (mountains or the sea) ve bir veya iki neden verin. Basit bağlaçlar (because, so) ve doğru zamirleri kullanın. 1-3 kısa cümleyle net bir görüş sunun ve duygularınızı spesifik örneklerle destekleyin.

例: I prefer the sea because I find the sound of waves and the open horizon very calming. The beach helps me relax and think clearly, while the mountains feel more isolated for me.

× Yes, I look out the window at the travelling because I don't want to catch the beautiful sights and this feeling more nostalgic.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window when travelling because I want to see the beautiful sights and feel more nostalgic.

Pronoun and small word choices were incorrect and caused meaning problems. 'At the travelling' is not correct; use 'when travelling' to indicate time. 'Look out the window' often takes 'of' as 'look out of the window'. 'I don't want to catch' contradicts the intended meaning; use 'I want to see' to express intention. 'This feeling more nostalgic' is ungrammatical; use 'feel more nostalgic'. Suggestion: use simple structures: 'I look out of the window when travelling because I want to see the beautiful sights and feel nostalgic.'

× This films came actually.

✓ Actually, these films came out.

Word order and plurality were incorrect. 'This films' mixes singular demonstrative with plural noun; use 'these films'. 'Came' alone is vague and needs a particle for meaning; if referring to release, use 'came out'. Also place 'actually' before the clause for natural emphasis. Suggestion: ensure demonstratives match noun number and use correct verb phrases like 'came out' for releases.

× I don't take a photo spot, I take a video of the camera outside the car window because it's feeling no nostalgic and.

✓ I don't take photos; I record a video with my camera through the car window because it makes me feel nostalgic and peaceful.

Several issues: 'photo spot' is incorrect — use 'photos' or 'a photo'; quantifier and noun forms must match. 'Take a video of the camera' is wrong; use 'record a video with my camera' or 'take a video'. 'It's feeling no nostalgic' is ungrammatical: use 'it makes me feel nostalgic' and add 'peaceful' as another adjective. Suggestion: choose correct verbs for camera actions ('take a photo', 'record a video') and use natural causative structures like 'makes me feel'. Also separate ideas with appropriate punctuation.

× Peaceful.

✓ It feels peaceful.

Single-word response lacks subject and verb; sentence needs a subject and verb to be complete. 'Peaceful' alone is acceptable in casual speech but for full sentences use 'It feels peaceful' or 'It is peaceful'. Suggestion: include a subject ('it') and copula ('is/feels').

× I completely prefer the same because she look at the scene you add more peaceful answer for and it's feeling realized more emotion.

✓ I prefer the same because when I look at the scene I feel more peaceful and more emotional.

Multiple pronoun and verb agreement errors: 'the same' is vague — better 'the same' can be 'the same (option)' but here 'I prefer the same' is acceptable though unclear; main issues are 'she look' where 'she' is wrong pronoun and verb lacks third-person 'looks' — but the intended subject is 'I'. Use 'when I look at the scene'. 'you add more peaceful answer for' is nonsensical; replace with 'I feel more peaceful'. 'it's feeling realized more emotion' incorrect passive and tense; use 'I feel more emotional' or 'it makes me feel more emotional'. Suggestion: keep subject consistent ('I') and use correct verb forms ('look' for I, 'looks' for he/she).