Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接且能理解，但表达较简单且有重复。应更自然地开头并用一两句细节补充来丰富内容，例如说明你喜欢看什么类型的景色或什么时候更常看。此外注意用词准确（如“see the scenery through the window”可换成更自然的“look at the scenery”）并避免多余词语。

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I especially enjoy watching the changing countryside — fields, small villages and occasional rivers — because it helps me relax and pass the time.

提案: 意思表达清楚但句子不够地道且有语法和逻辑问题（“could not go there anymore”不够明确）。建议先给一个简短的主题句，再解释原因并举例说明如何拍照或保存回忆。使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window to remember places I might not visit again. For example, I usually photograph interesting buildings or unique landscapes and later organise them into an album on my phone.

提案: 回答包含观点但表达不够简洁且有语法错误（如“give make me cheerful”）。建议用一到两句清晰说明偏好，再给出具体原因或例子。使用连接词如“because”或“so”并注意主谓一致与固定搭配（例如 “mountains make me feel cheerful”）。

例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy hiking and the peaceful atmosphere. The fresh air, green forests and panoramic views make me feel relaxed and happier than when I’m at the beach.

× Yes, because I could not go there anymore, so I must take photos of the scenery for my memory.

✓ Yes, because I cannot go there anymore, so I must take photos of the scenery for my memory.

句中使用的时态不一致且与情境不符。原句用“could not”表示过去或虚拟语气，但在这里说的是现在无法再去（present inability），应使用现在时的“cannot”。建议将“could not”改为“cannot”，以保持时态一致并准确表达现在的事实。

× Compared with the sea, I prefer the mountains because they are scenic views and beautiful landscapes.

✓ Compared with the sea, I prefer the mountains because they have scenic views and beautiful landscapes.

原句中用“they are scenic views”不合适，mountains（山）本身不是“scenic views（风景）”，而是“have scenic views”或“are scenic”。应改为“have scenic views”或直接说“because they are scenic and have beautiful landscapes”。这样能更自然地描述山的特点。

× Mountains always give make me cheerful.

✓ Mountains always make me cheerful.

原句中同时出现了“give”和“make”，造成结构重复和语法错误。正确的动词搭配是“make someone + adjective”，因此应去掉“give”，保留“make me cheerful”。