Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, and add one short supporting detail with a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I always look at the scenery outside the bus. I enjoy watching the changing views because they help me relax. For example, I often notice trees, fields and small villages as we pass them.

提案: Reduce fillers and use correct plural/word choice. Give a concise reason and one specific example using a linking word for coherence.

例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window if the view is peaceful. For instance, when I see a quiet lake or a line of mountains, I stop and take several pictures with my phone.

提案: Produce a clear direct answer first, then add a specific reason with linking words. Correct grammar (tense, articles, singular/plural) and avoid repetition. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer the mountains. I have seen mountains more often and I like them because they are peaceful and good for walking, so I can relax and enjoy fresh air.

× Yes, I always look scenery outside the bus.

✓ Yes, I always look at the scenery outside the bus.

The verb 'look' requires the preposition 'at' when directing attention to something. Also 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and does not need an article here. Use: 'look at the scenery outside the bus.' Suggestion: Use 'look at' + noun (or 'look out of the window at the scenery').

× Yes, of course. Like if it was, uh, peaceful sceneries, then I, I uh, capture that scenario with my phone.

✓ Yes, of course. For example, if it is peaceful scenery, I take a photo of it with my phone.

Several issues: 'sceneries' is not standard — 'scenery' is uncountable. The conditional tense should match the time frame: use present simple 'if it is' for general situations, not past 'if it was.' 'Capture that scenario' is awkward; 'take a photo of it' is clearer. Also use 'take a photo' rather than 'capture' in casual speech. Suggestion: Use 'if it is peaceful scenery' and 'I take a photo of it with my phone.' Note: This correction addresses preposition and noun-use problems and tense consistency.

× I will prefer like I may.

✓ I would prefer, maybe.

The speaker intends to express a preference; the correct modal for hypothetical or polite preference is 'would prefer.' 'I will prefer' is unnatural here. 'Like I may' is incorrect and redundant; 'maybe' conveys uncertainty. Suggestion: Use 'I would prefer' or 'I prefer' depending on context.

× I haven't see see in my life like I always see mountains, but I would prefer people like mountains.

✓ I haven't seen the sea in my life; I always see mountains, but I think people prefer the mountains.

'Haven't see' is wrong: use past participle 'seen' after 'have.' The phrase likely refers to 'the sea' not being seen. 'Like I always see mountains' is awkward; 'I always see mountains' is acceptable. 'I would prefer people like mountains' is ungrammatical and unclear; intended meaning seems to be 'I think people prefer the mountains' or 'I would prefer the mountains.' Suggestion: Use correct past participle 'seen' and clarify the intended subject and verb.

× In mountains there is peaceful environments.

✓ In the mountains there are peaceful environments.

When referring to a general area 'the mountains' needs the definite article 'the.' Also 'environments' plural requires the plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Alternatively, say 'The mountains are peaceful' or 'There are peaceful environments in the mountains.' Suggestion: Use 'the mountains' and match singular/plural with the verb.