Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Expand your answer into a short natural response: give a topic sentence and add one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid one-word answers and be specific about what you notice and why.

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching changing landscapes. For example, I like seeing local shops and parks pass by, which helps me relax and learn about different neighbourhoods.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but make it more natural by starting with a full sentence and adding a brief explanation. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep it concise.

例: No, I don’t take photos while I’m driving, because it would be unsafe; instead, I sometimes ask a passenger to take pictures or wait until we stop at a scenic viewpoint.

提案: The preference is stated, but the supporting reason is exaggerated and informal. Give a more realistic and varied reason, keep the tone natural, and avoid dramatic or unrealistic claims. Use linking words and provide one specific example or feeling.

例: I prefer the mountains because I feel more comfortable there and enjoy hiking; for instance, I like the quiet trails and views from hilltops, whereas I find the sea a bit unsettling due to the open water and strong waves.

× No, because I'm driving.

✓ No, because I'm driving.

This sentence is grammatically correct. The student uses 'I'm driving' (present continuous) appropriately to explain why they do not take photos while driving. No third person singular error is present.

× I prefer the mountains because the sea scares me, because sharks will kill me.

✓ I prefer the mountains because the sea scares me; I am afraid of sharks.

The original sentence is repetitive and awkwardly structured (sentence structure error). Using two consecutive 'because' clauses creates redundancy and unclear emphasis. Also 'sharks will kill me' is a grammatically correct future tense clause but sounds exaggerated and less appropriate for the context. The corrected version joins reasons clearly and uses 'I am afraid of sharks' to express fear more naturally. Suggestion: avoid repeating 'because' in the same sentence; use a semicolon or a conjunction and choose a more natural expression for fear.'