Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子语法和时态有错误，表意不够清晰；回答较长且有重复，应更直接开门见山并用连接词组织细节。建议用正确时态和更简洁的句子，例如将原因与细节分成两句，注意动词形式（traveling → travel / am travelling; what people are do → what people are doing）。可以加入一两个具体观察到的细节使内容更丰富。

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus. I find looking outside more comfortable than using my phone because it makes me dizzy. For example, I often watch people walking in the streets and notice changing landscapes, which helps pass the time.

提案: 表达基本清楚但有小语法和词汇问题，句子可更自然。避免重复（capturing every beautiful scenery / record it），动词时态一致（if I saw → if I see / when I see; will → would 或 use present tense）。可以用连接词使逻辑更流畅，并举一两个具体情境说明拍照的原因。

例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from the window. It has become a habit because I want to remember beautiful moments. For example, when I see a striking sunset, I take a quick photo and usually share it with my friends.

提案: 回答直接但有语法错误与表达不连贯（say → sea; run-on sentence）。建议先给出主题句，然后用一两句具体原因，并用连接词使条理清晰。可以加入具体例子或对比增强说服力。注意发音类似错误在书面上避免拼写错误。

例: I definitely prefer the sea. I enjoy running along the beach and doing water sports such as swimming or kayaking. Also, I love seafood, so coastal trips are my top choice when I want to relax.

× Yes I do because when I traveling by car or bus watching my phone just made me feel dizzy so I just lookout the window to kill the time by observing what people are do outside and the scenery out the window.

✓ Yes, I do, because when I travel by car or bus, watching my phone makes me feel dizzy, so I just look out the window to pass the time by observing what people are doing outside and the scenery.

错误类型：现在时用法（Present tense issue）。 说明（简体中文）：句中时态和动词形式不一致。“when I traveling” 应为一般现在时的主语 + 动词原形，改为 “when I travel”。“watching my phone just made me feel dizzy” 使用了过去式 “made”，但描述的是经常发生的情况，应使用一般现在时：”watching my phone makes me feel dizzy”。“I just lookout the window” 拼写和词序错误，应该是动词短语 “look out the window”。“to kill the time” 不地道，常用 “pass the time”。“what people are do” 中“do” 应为现在分词 “doing”。 建议：把句子中所有描述习惯性或经常发生的动作统一为一般现在时，检查动词形式（原形/第三人称单数）和动词短语搭配，注意分词（doing）和词序。

× Capturing every beautiful scenery is more like my habit.

✓ Capturing every beautiful scene is more like a habit of mine.

错误类型：过去分词/名词使用（Verb in the past participle form）。 说明（简体中文）：句中“scenery” 是不可数名词，前面不应加“every”，应使用可数名词“scene”或改用不同结构：”every beautiful scene” 或 “beautiful scenery” 不用 every。并且“is more like my habit” 不太地道，建议改为 “is more like a habit of mine” 或 “is a habit of mine”。 建议：遇到不可数名词（scenery）不要与 every 连用，考虑使用可数名词或改写句子；使用更自然的表达 “a habit of mine”。

× For example, if I saw the beautiful sunset out of the window, I will definitely record it with my phone and send it to my friends.

✓ For example, if I see a beautiful sunset out of the window, I will definitely record it with my phone and send it to my friends.

错误类型：过去时/条件句时态混用（Past tense issue）。 说明（简体中文）：条件句中使用了过去式 “if I saw” 但主句使用将来时 “I will”，时态不一致。如果表示一般真实条件，应使用一般现在时在 if 从句中：”if I see... I will...”。另外 “the beautiful sunset” 可改为更自然的 “a beautiful sunset”。 建议：在真实条件句中，if 从句用一般现在时，主句用将来时；注意冠词使用（a/the）。

× I prefer the sea definitely because I like running on the beach and playing some water sports and I also like eating seafood so say is my top choice.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea, because I like running on the beach, playing water sports, and eating seafood, so the sea is my top choice.

错误类型：句子结构错误（Sentence structure errors）。 说明（简体中文）：原句缺少逗号和并列连词的清晰划分，且“so say is my top choice” 是拼写/词序错误，应为 “so the sea is my top choice”。并列动词短语应保持形式一致（running, playing, eating）。 建议：使用逗号分隔并列成分，保持并列动词形式一致，注意词序和拼写（sea）。