Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct common mistakes (e.g. 'ceneric' → 'scenic', avoid repetition). Keep answers to 2–3 sentences and use natural phrases like 'I enjoy' or 'I like to'.

例: I usually look out the window when I travel because I enjoy the scenic views, especially sandy landscapes. Also, I often take photos and videos to capture memories, so I can share them with friends later.

提案: Eliminate redundancies and use clearer sequencing: give a main idea, then one or two supporting details with linking words like 'sometimes' or 'often'. Use correct tense and plural forms (e.g. 'sometimes', 'photos'). Avoid listing apps unless relevant—mention 'social media' instead.

例: Yes, I often take photos out of the car window, and sometimes we stop so I can get a better shot. I usually upload the best pictures to social media so I can share the memories with my friends.

提案: Structure your answer: give a clear choice or say you like both, then explain with specific reasons using linking words ('because', 'for example', 'however'). Reduce hesitations and correct phrasing (e.g. 'depending on who I go with', 'I can eat while driving' is odd—say 'I can have a picnic').

例: I like both, depending on who I go with. For instance, I enjoy mountains for photography and social trips with friends, while I prefer the sea when I want peace and relaxation after a stressful week.

× I usually do that because I love to see the ceneric views and I like the sand landscapes and I like I would like to capture the pictures and videos while I do the traveling.

✓ I usually do that because I love to see the scenic views and sandy landscapes, and I would like to take pictures and videos while I am travelling.

The sentence uses incorrect adjectives: 'ceneric' is a misspelling of 'scenic' and 'sand landscapes' should be 'sandy landscapes' (adjective form). Also 'I like I would like' is redundant and awkward; choose 'I would like'. 'Do the traveling' is unnatural; use progressive 'I am travelling' to describe an ongoing activity. Suggestions: check adjective forms and spellings, avoid repetition, and use continuous tense for actions in progress.

× So just give me a piece and as well as it's give I makemytrip memorable.

✓ So, it helps make my trip memorable.

This sentence is fragmented and contains several nonstandard phrases ('give me a piece', 'as well as it's give', 'makemytrip'). The intended meaning is better expressed as a simple clause: 'it helps make my trip memorable.' Suggestion: simplify the structure, use subject + verb + object, and avoid literal translations or unclear idioms.

× Yes, I would like to take pictures from the window of the car.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures from the car window.

Using 'would like' is not wrong but feels slightly formal for habitual action; 'like to take' matches the present habitual context. No grammatical error if keeping 'would like', but for consistency with other answers use simple present. Suggestion: match modality to context: use 'would like' for desires, 'like' for habits.

× Sometime I stop the car to take a nice view of the picture.

✓ Sometimes I stop the car to take a nice picture of the view.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (adverb). The phrase 'to take a nice view of the picture' has incorrect word order and noun choice; we say 'take a nice picture of the view.' Suggestion: use correct adverb forms and standard collocations ('take a picture of the view').

× I'm not taking just the pictures.

✓ I don't just take pictures.

'I'm not taking just the pictures' uses present continuous improperly for a habitual statement and has awkward word order. Use simple present 'I don't just take pictures' to express general habit. Suggestion: use simple present for routines and place 'just' before the verb or object as appropriate.

× I like to share those images on the WhatsApp and Snapchat and Instagram to my friends as well.

✓ I like to share those images with my friends on WhatsApp, Snapchat, and Instagram.

Use 'share with' (not 'share to') when indicating recipients. Also app names do not need 'the' before them. List apps with commas and use parallel structure. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for communication verbs and remove unnecessary articles.

× So I love to keep the memories.

✓ So I love keeping the memories.

'Love to keep the memories' is understandable but 'love keeping memories' is more natural. Use gerund after 'love' when referring to an activity. Suggestion: prefer 'love + -ing' for general enjoyment of activities.

× I prefer both mountain and the sea.

✓ I prefer both the mountains and the sea.

When referring generally to mountain landscapes, use the plural 'mountains' and include 'the' with both: 'the mountains and the sea.' Suggestion: use plural for general categories and include articles appropriately.

× It depends on whom I am going with, because mountain I like, I can take pictures, I can spend time with the friends and I can eat something while the driving and the sea give me the peace.

✓ It depends on who I am going with, because in the mountains I can take pictures, spend time with friends, and eat something while driving, and the sea gives me peace.

'Whom I am going with' is acceptable formally but 'who I am going with' is natural in speech; the original has many structural errors: missing articles ('the mountains'), incorrect verb form 'give me the peace' should be 'gives me peace', and unnecessary 'the' before 'friends' and 'driving'. Also combine clauses clearly and use parallel verb forms. Suggestion: use 'who' in conversation, include articles where needed, ensure subject-verb agreement ('sea gives'), and maintain parallel structure in lists.

× So if I'm stressed, I like to go to the sea.

✓ So if I'm stressed, I like to go to the sea.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and fits the context; no change needed. Suggestion: none.