Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中注意句子语法和时态一致性，避免拼写和小错误（如 on the car → in the car；help → helps）。另外把回答组织成一个清晰的主题句加一两个支持细节，使用连接词使逻辑更连贯，例如 because / so / which makes。尽量控制在最多五句内。可多给出具体场景或感受来丰富内容。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by bus or in the car because the changing scenery relaxes me and keeps me interested in the journey. For example, I like watching small towns and farmlands pass by, which helps me feel calmer and more curious about the places we drive through.

提案: 注意句子流畅性和准确用词（pictures 要复数；record it → record it to look at later）。避免重复词语（after after）。用连接词解释原因并举例说明何时或拍什么可以增加具体性。保持句子简洁。

例: Yes, I often take pictures of the scenery outside the window because I find the changing landscape fascinating and I want to record it to look back on later. For example, I usually photograph interesting buildings or sunlight on fields when I travel, then I save them in a folder on my phone.

提案: 注意语法和句子完整性（use present tense: I enjoy; prefer the sea, singular). 将回答组织为一条主题句并用一两句支持细节说明原因，避免断裂的短语，使用连词（because / such as）并给出具体例子（如看日落、听海浪）。控制在不超过五句。

例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy its peaceful atmosphere and the wide views of the horizon. For example, I love watching sunrises and sunsets over the water and listening to the sound of waves, which helps me relax and feel refreshed.

× Yes, I really love looking out of the window when I am traveling by both bus on the car for example.

✓ Yes, I really love looking out of the window when I am travelling by either bus or car, for example.

句中出现两个问题：1) “both bus on the car” 用法不正确，应该使用 either...or 来表示“要么……要么……”，并使用复数或单数视语境（此处为单一交通工具选择），改为 “either bus or car”。2) travel 的美式/英式拼写差异，保持一致（示例中用 travelling 更规范）；此外保留动名词 looking 正确用法。本条只按“Verb + -ing form”问题纠正并说明动名词用法正确，重点是修正连接词和介词错误（虽属于介词/连词类，但仅在允许列表内修改）。

× I enjoyed watching the passing landscape because it is relaxed and help me get more interest about the journey.

✓ I enjoy watching the passing landscape because it is relaxing and helps me become more interested in the journey.

原句时态和动词形式混用：1) 开头用 I enjoyed（过去式）但后文描述为一般事实，应使用现在时 enjoy。2) ‘it is relaxed’ 表达不自然，需用现在分词或形容词形式 relaxing 表示令人放松。3) help 主语为 it 或 watching，故需第三人称单数 helps。4) 'get more interest about' 不地道，应改为 become more interested in。根据列表，本处以“Present tense issue”为主进行修改并调整动词形式和搭配。

× Yes, because I'm really fascinated about the changing of the landscape and I want to take picture to record it and can be watched after after just in my daily life.

✓ Yes, because I'm really fascinated by the changing landscape and I want to take pictures to record it so I can look back at them later in my daily life.

问题包括动词短语和介词搭配：1) fascinated 后应接介词 by 而非 about（固定搭配）。2) 'changing of the landscape' 多余的 of 可省，直接用 'changing landscape' 更自然。3) take picture 应为复数 pictures 或加不定冠词 a picture，根据语境改为 pictures。4) 'can be watched after after just in my daily life' 语序和用词混乱，改为 'so I can look back at them later in my daily life'。本条按“Verb in the present participle form”来处理现在分词/动名词相关搭配及其造成的从句结构问题。

× I prefer the seas because I'm really enjoyed that.

✓ I prefer the sea because I really enjoy it.

错误包括时态和名词单复数：1) prefer 为现在时，后半句使用 enjoyed（过去式）不一致，应改为 enjoy（现在时）。2) 'the seas' 用法不自然，表示整体海洋可用 the sea 或 plural seas 需具体化，此处改为 the sea。3) 'that' 指代不明确，用 it 更合适。根据列表，本条按“Present tense issue”处理时态不一致并修正名词单复数及代词指代。

× The skies and the seas, the horizon and the sunset, Sunrise.

✓ I like the skies and seas, the horizon, and the sunrise or sunset.

原句为并列名词片段，缺乏谓语，属于句子结构错误，应补全动词或把其并入完整句子。改为一个完整表达（I like ...）并规范大小写与并列项的连接，'Sunrise' 首字母不应大写且需与 sunset 并列说明。依据列表，本条以“Sentence structure errors”来修正不完整句子并给出自然表达。