Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体清晰且内容相关，但存在冗余与语言不够简洁的问题。建议：1) 开头直接给出主题句，然后用1–2个简短的支持句解释原因；2) 避免重复词（如 sceneries, beautiful sceneries）；3) 注意固定搭配和小语法（例如 feel sick 或 get carsick，不用 car sick）。举例说明或添加具体场景能增强说服力。

例: Yes. I always look out of the window when travelling because I get car sick if I focus on my phone. For example, on long trips I watch the passing countryside to relax and it helps me feel better while enjoying the views.

提案: 回答内容明确并展示了个人身份（photographer），但有重复表述与语法小错误（a beautiful scenery → beautiful scenery；unforgettable moment → unforgettable moments）。建议：1) 精简句子，避免重复相同意思；2) 提供具体例子或频率（how often, what kinds of scenes）；3) 使用正确的名词复数与冠词。

例: Yes. As a photographer I always carry a camera and my phone to capture interesting landscapes. For example, I often photograph coastal views and rural scenes to document different lighting and moods.

提案: 回答直接并有个人色彩，但口语用词和结构可以更自然、礼貌。需注意语法（prefer A to B，不是 prefer A rather than B；lazy girl 在正式场合不太合适；laying → lying；see → seeing）。建议：1) 用更自然的表达给出偏好并说明原因；2) 加入具体细节（什么时候去海边，怎样放松）；3) 控制句子长度不超过5句。

例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I dislike strenuous hikes and tire easily. I much enjoy lying on the beach, watching the sunset and chatting with friends, which helps me relax.

× Definitely because I always have car sick, especially when I watch my mobile phone, so I always look out to the window at the sceneries to release it and I think it is a good way to broaden my horizon because I can see many beautiful sceneries.

✓ Definitely, because I always get carsick, especially when I watch my mobile phone, so I always look out of the window at the scenery to relieve it, and I think it is a good way to broaden my horizons because I can see many beautiful scenes.

句中“have car sick”用法不自然，应使用動詞短語“get carsick”。“look out to the window”介词错误，应为“look out of the window”。“sceneries”复数用法不常见，改为不可數名詞“scenery”或可數“scenes”；“release it”搭配不当，表示缓解晕车应使用“relieve it”。此外“broaden my horizon”常用复数“horizons”。（涉及动词-ing形式、介词和名词使用，按要求只改列出的语法类型中的动名词/现在分词及相关搭配）

× Yes, I'm a photographer so I always bring my camera and mobile with me when I go out because I think it is a good way to record a beautiful scenery and different landscapes. Finally, it is a good way to record unforgettable moment.

✓ Yes, I'm a photographer, so I always bring my camera and mobile with me when I go out because I think it is a good way to record beautiful scenery and different landscapes. Finally, it is a good way to record unforgettable moments.

句中“a beautiful scenery”中scenery通常为不可數名詞，不加不定冠詞“a”；“unforgettable moment”若泛指应使用复数“moments”。动名词/现在分词相关错误体现在名词的可数性和单复数搭配，应使用正确的名词形式。

× To be honest, I prefer the sea rather than the mountains because I'm a lazy girl so climbing the mountain is difficult for me and I always feel tired so quickly. But I really enjoy laying down on the beach and see the sunset and chat with my friends.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the sea to the mountains because I'm a lazy girl, so climbing mountains is difficult for me and I always get tired very quickly. But I really enjoy lying on the beach, seeing the sunset and chatting with my friends.

“prefer ... rather than ...” 搭配不当，正確應為“prefer A to B”。“climbing the mountain”一般泛指多座山时用复数“climbing mountains”；“feel tired so quickly”語序與用法不自然，改為“get tired very quickly”。“laying down”錯用，描述躺在沙滩應使用不及物動詞“lie”的现在分词“lying”；並且並列動作要統一動名詞形式，改為“seeing... and chatting...”。（按要求仅调整列出的连词、动词形式和相关错误）