Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct articles and verb forms, and add one specific example. Use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so") to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

例: I usually prefer travelling by car because I can enjoy a lot of natural scenery, such as hills, forests and rivers. Moreover, it is more comfortable for long journeys, so I like to sit by the window to relax and take photos of interesting views.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve grammar (articles, plural forms, verb agreement). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word like "so" or "because." Include a brief specific example of a memorable photo.

例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery outside the car because they help me remember trips. For example, I photographed a field of wildflowers last summer, and I still look at that picture when I miss that place.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and combine short fragments into coherent sentences. Correct singular/plural and use linking words like "because" and "for example." Add a specific detail about what you photograph or feel there.

例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy taking photos of the landscapes and quiet views. For example, I like photographing misty valleys and pine forests there, which feel peaceful and help me remember special moments.

× I prefer to travel by car because I can enjoy lot of natural scenery along the way such as hill, forest and river.

✓ I prefer to travel by car because I can enjoy a lot of natural scenery along the way, such as hills, forests, and rivers.

Missing quantifier 'a' before 'lot' and plural nouns needed for general categories (hill -> hills, forest -> forests, river -> rivers). Use commas to separate items and add 'a' to form 'a lot of'. Suggestion: Add appropriate articles/quantifiers and pluralize when referring to general types.

× It also more comfortable to sit in a car for long journey and having window seat help me relax and take a photo.

✓ It is also more comfortable to sit in a car for a long journey, and having a window seat helps me relax and take photos.

Missing verb 'is' required for sentence; 'a long journey' needs indefinite article 'a'; 'window seat' needs 'a'; subject-verb agreement: 'having a window seat' is singular so verb should be 'helps'; 'take a photo' changed to plural 'take photos' for idiomatic usage. Suggestion: Include the linking verb 'is', add articles before singular countable nouns, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use plural for habitual actions.

× Honestly, as I love taking photos of scenery outside the car such as forest, hills, rivers and fields of wildflowers, taking taking a picture help me remember those moment for a long time and I often look back at them when I miss a place or a trip.

✓ Honestly, as I love taking photos of the scenery outside the car, such as forests, hills, rivers, and fields of wildflowers, taking pictures helps me remember those moments for a long time, and I often look back at them when I miss a place or a trip.

Repeated word 'taking' removed. 'The scenery' needs definite article when referring to specific view; plural nouns required (forest -> forests; moment -> moments); 'taking pictures' is plural, so verb must agree: 'helps' not 'help'. Suggestion: Remove duplicates, use articles with uncountable/collective nouns when specific, pluralize countable nouns, and match verb to subject number.

× I prefer the mountain because I enjoy taking photos there.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I enjoy taking photos there.

When speaking generally about a type of landscape, use the plural 'mountains' rather than singular 'mountain'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general preferences of places.

× Peaceful and those picture help me remember a special moment.

✓ It is peaceful, and those pictures help me remember a special moment.

Original fragment 'Peaceful and those picture...' lacks a verb and has noun-number errors ('picture' should be 'pictures'). Added subject 'It' and verb 'is' to form a complete sentence and pluralized 'pictures'; also added comma and 'and' to connect ideas. Suggestion: Ensure each sentence has a subject and verb, and check noun-number agreement.