Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and incorrect grammar (e.g. "one of my favorite habit" should be "one of my favorite habits"). Mention a concrete example of a place or moment to make the answer more specific.

例: Yes, I do. I often look out of the window because I enjoy watching natural scenery, especially mountains and rivers. For example, when I travel to the countryside last summer, I watched the riverbanks and took a few photos because the light was beautiful.

提案: Use correct verb patterns and clearer vocabulary: say "I enjoy taking photos" rather than "I enjoy to take pictures." Keep answers to one main sentence plus a brief detail, and use linking words like "because" or "for example." Be specific about what you photograph (e.g. landscapes, rivers, architecture) and why (light, colors, memories).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos through bus or car windows because the changing light makes landscapes look dramatic. For example, I often photograph river reflections and mountain silhouettes when the sun is low because the colors are very striking.

提案: Answer directly with a clear preference or say you like both, then explain with specific reasons using correct vocabulary. Avoid unclear or incorrect words ("standing atmosphere", "as BSc", "ruining"). Use linking words like "because" and provide one specific example or comparison (e.g. "I like mountains for peace and the sea for relaxation").

例: I like both, but for different reasons. I prefer mountains when I want peace and fresh air because hiking is relaxing, while I choose the sea when I want to unwind and enjoy the beach and waves.

× Uh, definitely I do, uh, it is one of my favorite habit and I usually visit, uh, any places in the time I enjoy, I guessing you, especially mountain and river view.

✓ Uh, definitely I do. It is one of my favorite habits and I usually visit any place when I have time to enjoy it, especially mountains and river views.

Multiple sentence structure and agreement issues: 'one of my favorite habit' should be 'one of my favorite habits' (singular/plural agreement). 'I usually visit, uh, any places in the time I enjoy' is awkward and incorrect word order; correct form is 'I usually visit any place when I have time to enjoy it' to express the intended meaning. 'I guessing you' is ungrammatical and unclear so it was removed. 'mountain and river view' should be pluralized to 'mountains and river views' to match general preference. Suggest breaking ideas into separate sentences and using correct noun forms and word order.

× I openly, I open take picture.

✓ I often take pictures openly.

The original has incorrect word choice and order: 'openly, I open take picture' is not grammatical. 'Openly' relates to manner and 'open' is wrong here. 'I often take pictures openly' or simply 'I often take pictures' corrects adverb placement and uses plural 'pictures'. Suggest using 'often' for frequency and proper adverb placement before the main verb.

× I really enjoy to take pictures, uh, through the uh, uh, windows color buses because it's give me too much pleasure.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures through the windows of colorful buses because it gives me a lot of pleasure.

After 'enjoy' use the gerund form 'taking' not the infinitive 'to take' (verb + -ing). 'windows color buses' has wrong word order and missing preposition; correct phrasing is 'windows of colorful buses'. 'it's give' is subject-verb agreement error; use 'it gives'. 'too much pleasure' is unnatural here; 'a lot of pleasure' is more natural. Suggest memorizing verbs followed by -ing (e.g., enjoy + -ing) and checking noun phrase order and subject-verb agreement.

× Especially I love to take photo landscape fixture and some natural pictures.

✓ Especially, I love to take landscape photos and other nature pictures.

Word choice and order problems: 'take photo landscape fixture' is incorrect; the correct noun phrase is 'landscape photos' or 'landscape photographs'. 'natural pictures' is better expressed as 'nature pictures'. Also after 'love' the infinitive 'to take' is acceptable but parallel style 'I love to take' -> 'I love to take landscape photos' is fine; using 'I love taking' could also work. Suggest using correct noun phrases ('landscape photos') and consistent verb forms.

× I prefer both uh because mountain give me uh standing atmosphere and as BSc give me a uh pressure so I love to ruining both.

✓ I prefer both because mountains give me a calming atmosphere and the sea gives me a refreshing feeling, so I love both.

Multiple issues: 'mountain give' should be 'mountains give' (subject-verb agreement and pluralization). 'standing atmosphere' is unclear; likely intended 'calm' or 'soothing' — corrected to 'calming atmosphere'. 'as BSc' is nonsensical; interpreted as 'the sea' and changed to 'the sea gives me a refreshing feeling' making subject-verb agreement 'sea gives'. 'I love to ruining both' is incorrect verb choice and form; 'ruining' is wrong word and tense, corrected to 'I love both'. Suggest ensuring subjects and verbs agree in number, use appropriate vocabulary to express feelings about scenery, and avoid incorrect verb forms like 'ruining'.