Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect verb forms.

例: Yes — I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus because I prefer not to use my phone. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes and city streets, which helps me relax and notice small details I would miss otherwise.

提案: Correct grammar and clarity: answer the question directly (yes or no), then explain briefly with specific examples. Use correct verb forms and simpler vocabulary if unsure.

例: Not usually. When I'm on business trips I avoid using my phone, so I prefer to look at the scenery rather than take photos. This helps me relax and I often notice small details like rivers or old villages that I would otherwise miss.

提案: Be concise and natural: give a clear preference in the first sentence, then support it with two specific reasons linked by a connector. Use natural collocations (e.g., 'not my cup of tea', 'spend time at the beach').

例: I prefer the sea to the mountains. I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach with friends because it lifts my mood and helps me unwind after a busy day.

× On buses I don't really like to use my phone, so looking out the window at the scenery is one of my best thing I will do when traveling.

✓ On buses I don't really like to use my phone, so looking out of the window at the scenery is one of the best things I do when traveling.

Article error and singular/plural: 'one of my best thing' is incorrect because 'one of' requires a plural noun; change to 'one of the best things'. Also 'looking out the window' is acceptable, but 'looking out of the window' is more natural in this context. 'I will do' is awkward for habitual action—use simple present 'I do' to match the habitual context.

× On business I is Lee avoid being on my phone so I only like to look out of the window and take the impressing conscious country countryside.

✓ On business I usually avoid being on my phone, so I like to look out of the window and take in the impressive countryside.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'I is Lee' is incorrect and likely a typo; use 'I usually' for frequency. 'Avoid' agrees with subject 'I'. 'Take the impressing conscious country countryside' contains several errors: 'take in' is the correct verb for absorbing a view, 'impressing' should be 'impressive', and 'countryside' is the correct noun. The sentence now uses correct verb forms and word order.

× It help me relax and notice more details like villages or rivers that I would otherwise miss.

✓ It helps me relax and notice more details like villages or rivers that I would otherwise miss.

Present tense subject-verb agreement: 'It help' is incorrect; with third-person singular subject 'it' the verb requires an -s: 'helps'. The rest of the sentence is correct and matches the present habitual meaning.

× Climbing is not my cup of tea, so I don't really like to choose the mountain beside.

✓ Climbing is not my cup of tea, so I don't really like to choose the mountains.

Tense/number and awkward phrasing: 'choose the mountain beside' is ungrammatical and unclear. If expressing a preference between mountains and sea, use plural 'mountains' and a simpler verb: 'I don't really like the mountains.' This matches the question and present preference.

× I like swimming and chilling with my friends at the beach because this can bring a good mood for me and it can reduce stress after a day.

✓ I like swimming and chilling with my friends at the beach because it puts me in a good mood and reduces my stress after a long day.

Word choice and collocation: 'bring a good mood for me' is unnatural; use 'puts me in a good mood'. 'Reduce stress after a day' is vague; 'reduces my stress after a long day' is clearer. Also change 'can bring' to simple present 'puts' to express habitual cause-effect.