Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 발음 오류를 고치세요. 현재 문장에는 시제·조동사·명사 선택 실수(예: "I'm usually look", "on a fossil")와 어색한 연결 표현이 있습니다. 더 자연스럽게 답하려면 주제 문장으로 직접 응답한 후 linking word(예: because, so, when)를 사용해 구체적 이유나 예를 덧붙이세요. 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 유지하고 불필요한 음성적 충전(Uh)을 줄이세요.

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I'm traveling by car, especially if it's a place I haven't been to before. I do this because I often notice interesting sights that I don't see in my hometown, such as unusual buildings or landscapes. Sometimes I point them out to my travel companions so we can talk about them.

提案: 내용은 잘 전달되었지만 답변 길이를 1~2문장 더 추가해 세부 정보를 넣으면 더 좋습니다. linking word(For example, so)로 이유나 구체적 상황(어떤 풍경, 어떤 기기 사용 등)을 덧붙이세요. 또한 반복을 피하고 단어 선택을 다양화하면 점수가 올라갑니다.

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car window when I'm traveling. For example, I like photographing coastal views or mountain ranges using my smartphone, and I later organize the best shots into an album so I can easily look back on those memories.

提案: 문법과 어휘 표현을 다듬으세요(예: "some bathing" → "bathing" 또는 "sunbathing", "the sounds of the wave is" → "the sound of the waves is"). 또한 주제 문장 뒤에 구체적 이유와 한두 가지 예를 연결해 내용의 풍부함을 높이세요. 연결어(For example, because, which)로 문장을 매끄럽게 이어주세요.

例: I prefer the sea because I love swimming and sunbathing on the beach. The sound of the waves is very calming to me, and I often feel refreshed and recharged after a day by the sea. For example, after a weekend at the coast I usually return home feeling more relaxed and energetic.

× Yes, I'm usually look out the window when I'm on a fossil in a car, especially if I'm going somewhere new.

✓ Yes, I usually look out the window when I'm in a car, especially if I'm going somewhere new.

The sentence uses incorrect verb form 'I'm usually look' where the present simple 'I usually look' is required for habitual actions. 'I'm on a fossil in a car' contains wrong words and preposition: 'on a fossil' is meaningless here and the correct expression is 'in a car' for being inside a vehicle. Suggestion: Use simple present for routines (I usually look) and use the preposition 'in' with 'car'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Uh, since I can see interesting things that I don't see where I live.

✓ I like it because I can see interesting things that I don't see where I live.

The original fragment begins with 'since' but lacks a main clause to complete the sentence, making the structure incomplete. Rewriting to include a main clause ('I like it because') completes the idea and matches conversational intent. Suggestion: Ensure subordinate clauses are attached to a main clause. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, I love capturing beautiful landscapes from the car window, especially when I'm traveling.

✓ Yes, I love capturing beautiful landscapes from the car window, especially when I travel.

Using present simple 'when I travel' is more natural for habitual actions; 'when I'm traveling' is not strictly wrong but consistency with habitual context favors simple present. Suggestion: Use present simple for routines ('when I travel'). Grammar problem type ID:6

× I enjoy sharing these photos on social media or looking back at them later to relive those moments.

✓ I enjoy sharing these photos on social media or looking back on them later to relive those moments.

The phrase 'looking back at them' is understandable but 'looking back on them' is the more idiomatic collocation in English when referring to memories. Tense is fine; change preposition for natural usage. Suggestion: Use common collocations ('look back on'). Grammar problem type ID:11

× I prefer the sea because I love swimming and some bathing on the beach.

✓ I prefer the sea because I love swimming and sunbathing on the beach.

'Some bathing' is incorrect word choice; the usual term is 'sunbathing' if referring to lying in the sun. Also no extra article needed before 'swimming'. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms ('sunbathing') and keep parallel structure ('swimming and sunbathing'). Grammar problem type ID:22

× The sounds of the wave is incredibly coming for me.

✓ The sound of the waves is incredibly soothing to me.

'The sounds of the wave is' has subject-verb agreement errors and singular/plural confusion: use 'sound' (singular) or 'sounds' (plural) with corresponding verb. Also 'incredibly coming for me' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'incredibly soothing to me' conveys the intended meaning. Suggestion: Make subject and verb agree and choose natural adjective phrases ('soothing to me'). Grammar problem type ID:27

× When I see the sea I feel refreshed and recharged.

✓ When I see the sea, I feel refreshed and recharged.

This sentence is grammatically correct in tense and meaning; only a missing comma after the introductory clause is recommended for clarity. Suggestion: Add a comma after introductory adverbial clause. Grammar problem type ID:6