Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子需要更自然、语法更准确，并控制长度（不超过五句）。注意时态一致和冠词、复数形式，例如使用現在一般時描述習慣（I look / When I travel），不要多餘重複。可用一個主題句然後一兩個支持細節，並用連接詞使語流更順暢。

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I find watching the scenery relaxing, and it helps me unwind after a busy day. So instead of using my phone, I prefer to enjoy the view and let my mind rest.

提案: 句子有語法錯誤與不自然表達（例如 we when we cross / you can took），時態和主語需一致。回答要更具體說明頻率和情況，可加連接詞簡潔支持細節；控制在三句以內。

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when we drive through mountains. The rural landscapes and winding roads make great photos, so I usually stop to capture them on my phone.

提案: 表達需更自然和準確（例如 say "I prefer the sea"；不要用“stand behind the sea”）。提供一個明確主題句，然後用一兩個具體原因並用連接詞銜接，避免冗長或重複。

例: I prefer the sea because it makes me feel calm and relaxed. Also, the coastline offers diverse marine life and open views that you rarely get in the mountains, which is why I enjoy spending time by the ocean.

× Yes, looking out the window is the best way for me to relax myself when traveled.

✓ Yes, looking out the window is the best way for me to relax when I travel.

原句中用的是过去式“traveled”，但句意是在描述一般习惯或常态（现在时），应使用一般现在时“travel”。另外“relax myself”在英语中多余，通常只说“relax”。建议将时间与主句保持时态一致，使用一般现在时表达习惯性动作。

× When travel by bus or cars, rather than playing with my phones, appreciating scenery is a better way to calm down.

✓ When I travel by bus or car, rather than playing with my phone, I prefer to appreciate the scenery to calm down.

原句缺少主语和动词一致的形式，应为“I travel”。“cars”与前文单复数不一致且此处泛指应使用单数“car”。“phones”应为“phone”（单数或用 my phones 也不自然），并且句子结构更自然的表达是“prefer to appreciate the scenery”。建议完整写出主语并使动词形式与主语一致，保持单复数一致。

× Yes, I do take some pictures of the calm and beautiful scenery outside the car window.

✓ Yes, I do take some pictures of the calm and beautiful scenery outside the car window.

这句语法基本正确，但可注意“scenery”是不可数名词，前面不加复数形式是正确的。此处仅提示主谓一致和名词用法无误。

× Sometimes we when we cross mountains you can took fantastic photos of the rural scenery.

✓ Sometimes, when we cross mountains, you can take fantastic photos of the rural scenery.

原句中有多余的“we”和时态错误“took”(过去式)与“can”(情态动词)不搭配。情态动词“can”后应接动词原形“take”。同时句子需要逗号隔开时间状语，删除多余的“we”。建议使用“can take”来表示可能性或能力。

× I prefer sea.

✓ I prefer the sea.

在英语中表示喜欢某一大类自然环境时通常在名词前加定冠词“the”。此外“sea”单独使用需要冠词以指代“海洋”这一概念。建议使用“The sea”来表达偏好。

× When I stand behind the sea, I feel calm and comfortable.

✓ When I stand by the sea, I feel calm and comfortable.

英文中表示在海边应使用介词“by”或“at”，而不是“behind”。“behind the sea”通常表示在海的后面（在陆地的另一侧），不符合上下文。建议使用“by the sea”或“at the seaside”。

× What's more, you can see fascinating creatures in seas, what you can't see in mountains or in land.

✓ What's more, you can see fascinating creatures in the sea that you can't see in the mountains or on land.

原句中“in seas”用法不自然，通常用“in the sea”或“in seas”要表示泛指但此处应加定冠词。关系代词使用错误，应该用“that”连接限定性从句。此外“in land”不正确，应为“on land”。建议使用“in the sea”、“in the mountains”与“on land”以符合惯用搭配。