Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện rõ ràng và mạch lạc: trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, tránh từ thừa và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Nên dùng cấu trúc đơn giản: I do/No, I don't và bổ sung 1–2 câu hỗ trợ cụ thể (tại sao và cảm giác khi nhìn). Sử dụng các liên từ cơ bản (because, so, when) để câu trôi chảy hơn. Ví dụ sửa lỗi: "in their way on work or school" không rõ nghĩa — nên nói rõ lúc đi làm hay đi học.

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax. For example, when I commute to work I enjoy watching trees and people because it makes the journey feel shorter.

提案: Cải thiện từ vựng và chính xác ngữ pháp: tránh từ sai như "text photo"; dùng cụm từ chuẩn như "take photos" hoặc "capture memories". Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích mục đích (to remember places, share with friends) và nêu tần suất (always/often/sometimes). Giảm tiếng lòng lưỡng lự (uh, umm) và nối ý bằng linking words (because, for example, especially).

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery to capture memories of the places I visit. For example, I usually take pictures when the light is good or when the view is unusual, and I sometimes share them with friends afterwards.

提案: Tập trung vào câu trả lời trực tiếp và đưa lý do rõ ràng: bắt đầu với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer the sea) rồi giải thích 1–2 lý do cụ thể (I like swimming, sunshine, relaxing). Hạn chế lặp chữ và tiếng ngập ngừng; dùng từ đúng số (one of them has its own attraction). Có thể thêm một ví dụ hoặc so sánh ngắn để làm rõ ý.

例: I prefer the sea because I love the warm weather and swimming. For example, I usually relax on the beach in summer, listen to the waves and go for a swim, which makes me feel refreshed.

× Yes, it's kind of funny and I think that is either way to me to face relaxed and peaceful in their way on work or school.

✓ Yes, it's kind of funny, and I think it helps me feel relaxed and peaceful when I am traveling to work or school.

The original sentence has unclear structure and several issues: incorrect phrasing ('either way to me to face'), wrong pronoun ('their way'), and missing verb forms for the context. Reword to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'I think it helps me feel relaxed and peaceful when I am traveling to work or school.' This puts verbs in correct tense and uses appropriate pronouns and prepositions. Suggested improvement: break ideas into smaller clauses, ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb, and choose correct prepositions ('when I am traveling to work or school').

× Oh, I am really addicted to text photo everywhere.

✓ Oh, I am really into taking photos everywhere.

'Addicted to text photo' is incorrect collocation and word choice. Use 'into' or 'addicted to' with a gerund: 'taking photos'. Also 'text photo' is meaningless here. Suggestion: use correct collocations like 'into taking photos' or 'addicted to taking photos'. Improvement: study common verb + noun collocations and use gerunds after 'into' and 'addicted to'.

× Uh, to save the memory or where I go then uh, umm, of course I always take photo when I looking the scenery on bus or car, uh, especially in the the flight.

✓ To keep memories of where I go, of course I always take photos when I look at the scenery from a bus or car, and especially on flights.

Multiple issues: word order ('to save the memory or where I go'), incorrect verb form ('take photo' should be 'take photos'), incorrect verb form 'looking' should be 'look at', and awkward prepositions ('on bus or car', 'in the flight'). Corrections: 'To keep memories of where I go' expresses purpose; use plural 'photos'; use 'look at the scenery' and 'from a bus or car' or 'on flights'. Improvement: practice correct verb patterns for intention (To + verb), correct prepositions for transport ('on a bus', 'in a car', 'on a flight'), and pluralization for countable nouns like 'photos'.

× Uh, one of them also have the own attraction, but in my opinion, I think that I prefer the sea because, uh, I love uh, summer and I only go to the beach at the summer.

✓ Both have their own attractions, but in my opinion I prefer the sea because I love summer and I only go to the beach in summer.

Problems: subject-verb agreement ('one of them also have' should be 'one of them has' or rephrase), awkward possessive phrasing ('the own attraction' should be 'their own attractions'), and article misuse ('at the summer' should be 'in summer' or 'in the summer'). Also 'Both have their own attractions' is clearer than 'One of them...'. Improvement: ensure pronouns agree in number ('their' with 'both'), match verb form to subject, and use correct prepositions with seasons ('in summer').

× Uh, uh, if you have me feel, umm.

✓ Um, I'm not sure how to explain that.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear ('if you have me feel' is not meaningful). Provide a natural, relevant response like 'I'm not sure how to explain that' or 'If you ask me, ...'. Improvement: when unsure, use common phrases: 'If you ask me...' or 'I'm not sure how to explain that.'