Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然且語法正確；主題句後加一到兩個具體細節並使用連接詞以保持語意流暢。注意時態與名詞單複數，以及不要出現不相關或拼寫錯誤的詞（例如 skiing 錯用）。建議縮短為不超過五句，並避免冗詞。

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching people and local life. For example, I like seeing street vendors and children playing in parks, which gives me a sense of the place. It’s a relaxing way to pass the time.

提案: 內容不清楚且語言錯誤較多。需使用清晰的原因說明並用連接詞連接句子；修正拼寫與詞彙（例如 “come out of the blood”, “scanner” 用詞錯誤）。保持句子簡潔並提供一個具體例子。

例: Yes, I sometimes try to take photos, but it’s difficult because the car moves quickly. As a result, my pictures often come out blurry. For example, on the highway I don’t have enough time to focus before the scenery passes.

提案: 回答結構不錯，有主題句與支持細節，但要修正語法與數量一致（mountain → mountains, ocean → the ocean 或 seas），並完成未說完的句子。可再加入比較或個人偏好作總結，使回答更完整。

例: It’s hard to choose because I like both. I enjoy the mountains for hiking; the forests and flowers make me feel relaxed and refreshed. On the other hand, I love the sea for swimming and watching the waves, so if I had to choose I might prefer the sea for holidays.

× Yes, I enjoyed that.

✓ Yes, I enjoy that.

该句在回答关于习惯性或一般性的行为时，应使用一般现在时而不是过去时。"enjoyed"为过去式，暗示过去的动作，而学生在描述现在仍然存在的习惯或喜好，应使用"enjoy"。建议将动词改为一般现在时以与语境一致。

× When I look out the windows when traveling by bus or car, I can watch different skiing and watch people what are they doing.

✓ When I look out of the windows when travelling by bus or car, I can see different sceneries and watch what people are doing.

该句存在多处问题： 1) 介词：应使用"look out of"或简略为"look out"，但保留"of"更自然。原句缺乏恰当介词。 2) 名词误用："skiing"（滑雪）与语境不符，应为"scenery"或"sceneries"表示景色。 3) 从句顺序错误："watch people what are they doing"语序不正确，正确应为宾语从句"watch what people are doing"。 改正建议：使用正确介词，替换不恰当名词，并把从句按英语语序调整。

× It is interesting for me.

✓ It is interesting to me.

该句中介词搭配更自然的是"interesting to me"而不是"for me"。虽然"for me"不是严格的语法错误，但在表达个人感受时英语更常用"interesting to me"。建议使用更地道的介词搭配。

× Yes, I often try to but it is difficult because the car moves very fast.

✓ Yes, I often try to, but it is difficult because the car moves very fast.

主要是标点和连词使用，原句缺少逗号导致连读不顺。时态使用为一般现在时正确，但需要在"try to"后补上逗号或接宾语（如"take photos"）。建议将句子补全并加标点，例如"I often try to, but..."或更完整地"I often try to take photos, but..."。

× Umm, so the photo usually come out of the blood.

✓ Umm, so the photos usually come out blurred.

原句结构和用词有严重错误： 1) 主谓一致："photo"单数与动词"come"需要第三人称单数形式"comes"，或将名词改为复数并用"come"。 2) 词汇错误："of the blood"显然不合语境，可能是想说"blurred"（模糊的）但拼写/发音错误。 综合改为复数形式"photos"并用形容词"blurred"来描述照片效果，语义最通顺。建议注意发音和拼写以免产生误解。

× For example when I'm on the highway I have in don't have enough time to focus the camera before the scanner passes.

✓ For example, when I'm on the highway I don't have enough time to focus the camera before the scenery passes.

该句存在多处结构和词语错误： 1) 冗余和错误词序："I have in don't have"是语音导致的重复，应为"I don't have"。 2) 词汇不当："scanner"与上下文不符，应为"scenery"（风景）或"scene"。 3) 标点：在从句前加逗号更清晰。 建议说话时放慢速度，注意不要重复并选择合适名词表达。

× Actually it is difficult for me to choose just one because I love both.

✓ Actually, it is difficult for me to choose just one because I love both.

该句语法基本正确，但缺少逗号以提高可读性。建议在句首副词后加逗号使口语转折更自然。

× I love climbing mountain because the scenery is full of trees and flowers which can make me feel relaxed and refreshed.

✓ I love climbing mountains because the scenery is full of trees and flowers, which makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

问题包括： 1) 单复数："mountain"在泛指时应使用复数"mountains"（或用定冠词/不定冠词改写）。 2) 主谓一致：定语从句中主语是"which"指代"the scenery"，谓语应为单数"makes"而不是"make"。 3) 建议加逗号分隔定语从句使句子更清晰。 建议注意名词单复数和从句谓语的一致性。

× Also ocean are very beautiful and I can swim in and enjoy the.

✓ Also, oceans are very beautiful and I can swim in them and enjoy myself.

该句存在多个问题： 1) 单复数：应为"oceans"或加定冠词"the ocean is"。原句"ocean are"主谓不一致。 2) 代词缺失："swim in and enjoy the"缺少宾语，应该是"swim in them and enjoy myself"或"swim in the ocean and enjoy it"。 3) 建议在句首加逗号并补全宾语，确保主谓一致和代词指代明确。